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if this story didnt have so much secksing or swears id say show it to ur english teacher.
if this story didnt have so much secksing or swears id say show it to ur english teacher.
I'd show it anyway. XD
My english teacher's a weirdo and he'd probably take the story and go to the bathroom and jack off to it.
lol i got a teacher who got a boner while teatching he was standing up n talkin bout somethin n he just suddenly got a hard on we were laughing our butts off lol
i think i know who it was who wrigged the faris wheel it was that guy in the mask from the earlier chaprters who didnt want Adam to kill Big N Salty
A
Good job, 50 pages! You deserve a present! The thread is over the hill!
At 6/9/06 12:06 AM, Tweak_Dryerlint wrote: By the way, how were exams?
No complaints, I got nothing lower than a B.
Anyways, 50 page celebration! WOOT! I honestly didn't think it would go this far. Thanks to everybody who reads the story. I've already got the ending planned, and it may be surprising to some of you. I'm even toying with the idea of creating a sequel, but I'm not sure yet. This story is getting close to its end, and I'm only expecting to do about 3-4 more sections before it will all be done. But here's the next section you've been waiting for.
"Let's play some video games," Adam said. It wasn't so much that he wanted to play video games, just that video games had always been a source of mindless fun for him, and he could have time to think about other things while destroying zombies or killing hookers. But Big 'N' Salty's game collection was far from impressive. Not a game above the "E for everyone" level. Big 'N' Salty looked excited as he began pulling games off of the shelf next to his plasma screen television. "Ooooo, Kyle, should we play Spongebob Squarepants: Legend of the Lost Spatula? Or maybe Barbie in Fairytopia: the videogame?" the rapper asked. Adam did not respond, he just began digging through the piles of video games, searching for something at least semi-violent. The most hardcore game he found was an old Spyro the dragon game.
With an exasperated sigh, Adam said, "You just pick something. But where can I get something to drink?" Big 'N' Salty squealed with excitement and began sorting through the games, only raising his head long enough to point in the general vicinity of a door. Adam made his way to the door and opened it. It opened to a long, steep staircase running down for what seemed to be an eternity. "Down here?" Adam called out uncertainly. Big 'N' Salty raised his head to see what Adam was looking at, and when he did, his eyes widened, and he jumped up out the pile of video games he had created and ran over to the door, slamming it shut. He stared at Adam menacingly as he locked the door. "The downstairs is off-limits," he said, a strange look in his eyes. "Now come, friend Kyle. Let's play our video game."
Adam followed unwillingly. He now knew his mission. He had to get down into the basement and figure out what Big 'N' Salty was hiding. Adam made up his mind that he would sneak out later that night. While Adam played children's games for what he thought to be nearly five hours straight, in the back of his mind he made plans of how to escape his room unnoticed and investigate the basement. Good thing he had gadgets.
Finally, Big 'N' Salty grew tired of questing for Spongebob's lost spatula, and decided it was bedtime. Big 'N' Salty yawned heavily, said his goodnight, and made his way to bed. Winston led Adam to his room. As Winston left and Adam crashed on his bed, he realized how tired he really was. But he knew it was best to wait at least an hour before departing. He reached for his PSP, to help him pass the time, and saw that it was flashing and said, "TWO NEW CHARACTERS UNLOCKED!" Adam clicked view, and saw that the first message was from the Militia.
Vance's face appeared on the screen. "Hello, Adam. We heard about what happened to you, and we're sending in Krunk tonight to finish the mission." The screen then flashed to Krunk himself. "Listen, boy, dis is important," holo-Krunk said. "You need ta meet me at tha front gate at 2 o'clock tonight ta let me in. Me and some otha agents will be patrollin' the fence, takin' out any guards we see. We'd come in by air, but guards on tha inside would realize what happened an' alert Big 'N' Salty, and he could get away. An' tha fence is too high ta climb, plus it's got those electrocution-thingies, and we'll get shocked if we touch it, you know what I mean. So you're tha best shot we got. Just be there by then, and we'll tell ya what ta do. We're countin' on ya, boy." The screen again flashed to Vance. "Also, Natasha hasn't responded to her communicator," Vance said. "This was supposed to be her job, but we haven't heard from her at all. Oh well, it's too late now. We'll find her later. But do send us a message if you hear from her." Then the screen went blank.
Adam looked down at the other message. It was from Natasha. Adam pressed play, prepared for the worst. It was Viper again. "Hello, Adam," Viper sneered. "It's time we ended this, don't you think? I've found a way for you to get me inside. Once I've killed that bastard, you won't ever have to see me again. Meet me at the front gate at 1 am, sharp." The screen flashed to Natasha. She was bound, gagged, and handcuffed to the couch. A box sat in her lap. A box which was somehow familiar to Adam. With horror, he realized it was the bomb-in-a-box which Vance had made. The screen then went back to Viper. "Ingenious device Vance made, really," he said. "I've rigged it with this detonator. If you're not there at the prearranged time, exactly, I'm going to press this button." He held up a remote-like device with only one button. "Your little girlfriend will go boom. So be there, or not only will she die, but I'll find you and kill you as well." The screen again went blank.
Adam cursed aloud. If he had to meet Viper at 1, and Krunk at 2, how would he get into the basement? And what would happen when Viper did get inside? Would he really just kill Big 'N' Salty and leave? And how would Adam find Natasha again? So many questions buzzed inside Adam's head, he couldn't think straight. But he had a sick feeling in his gut that, like it or not, they would all be answered soon.
He glanced at the clock. It was 11:30. He still had time to investigate the basement. But he knew that time was now a factor. He couldn't wait an hour to make sure everyone was asleep. Adam got up, stuffed all of his gadgets into his pockets, and tiptoed to the door, opening it a crack. Adam almost jumped as he saw Big 'N' Salty leaving his own room and walking down the stairs. But no one had noticed him yet.
Does Adam...
A) Follow Big 'N' Salty
B) Get back on Big 'N' Salty's laptop now that he has left his room
C) Make his way down to the basement unseen
I vote A.
1500th post in this thread!
At 6/11/06 07:22 PM, -Tantalus- wrote: B) Get back on Big 'N' Salty's laptop now that he has left his room
B, hopefully, he'll find more porn and fap
At 6/10/06 04:37 PM, hoops31237 wrote: update:
44 pages
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50 pages (congrats!)
past 1337 posts! (congrats!)
if this story didnt have so much secksing or swears id say show it to ur english teacher.
Show it to your teacher anyway, its genius!!1<(look at my 1)!!
I'm back. Call the Police
c and a but if you count only 1 i vote c
This is a story I made.Is it good?no one reads it because it is to long.but to me,its worth reading.
At 6/12/06 01:20 AM, TrantaLock wrote: This is a story I made.Is it good?no one reads it because it is to long.but to me,its worth reading.
Sorry, but it's crap. You leave out tons of spaces, and have you ever heard of PARAGRAPHS? It's not too long, it's just PAINFUL to read.
I pick C. Head down to the basement.
Definitly B. Look at the convos.
How's he supposed to know whether he should help Viper or not unless he knows why he wants to kill Big n salty?
Goddamn when is he going to post again?
Adam watched as Big 'N' Salty made his way down the staircase. It was possible that it was just an innocent food-run, but then Adam knew it couldn't have been, as there was a refridgerator in Big 'N' Salty's room. Also, the rapper moved quickly, as if trying to make little noise, and didn't yawn once. Adam checked his watch again, and decided he had enough time to follow him, just to be sure he wasn't up to something. Keeping his head low, Adam traced Big 'N' Salty's steps quietly and at a safe distance of twenty feet.
Adam was for some reason not at all surprised when the rapper went down into the basement. Though he wanted to follow, Adam was sure that Big 'N' Salty would notice he was there. Adam checked his watch again. 12:05. He hid behind the couch, waiting for Big 'N' Salty to return. He did so in nearly ten minutes, and somehow, did not notice Adam, and made his way back upstairs, leaving the door swinging wide open. Adam watched as the rapper retreated up the stairs. His mind was then made up. He had to go down into the basement. And he only had 45 minutes to investigate before he had to meet Viper. Adam gazed down into the darkness, and knew whatever he found down there he wasn't going to like. Shutting the door behind him, Adam began his journey into the basement.
The stairway was steep and narrow. That added to the fact that Adam was in complete blackness, it would've been very easy for him to slip and fall down the stairs. Adam held his hands out and touched the wall, feeling with his feet where one step ended and another began. Going that way, it took him nearly 3 minutes to make it all the way down the staircase. Finally, he felt around for another stair but didn't find one. He assumed that he was at the end of the staircase, and he groped the wall for a light switch. He found it after a few second's search and flipped on the light.
He was in a plain room. A bed, a lampstand, a television with a VCR... a normal room. Adam flipped on the TV, and it was on a fuzzy screen. Adam turned on the VCR, and a movie began playing. Adam watched as a fat white man entered the room on the screen, holding a little girl's hand. The girl looked to be about only six years old. With a touch of shock, he noticed that the room on the TV and the room he was in were one and the same. And then the fat man began undressing the little girl. Adam watched in horror as the scene further developed. The girl began crying as the fat man took advantage of her. It was a child porno. Big 'N' Salty was filming child pornos in his basement. Adam turned off the TV. He had seen enough. But then he noticed a door to the left of the bed. And he knew it was where he had to go next.
He tried the door, but it was locked. Adam then pulled out his PSP, turned on the laser function, and melted the lock. After waiting a few seconds for the hissing metal to cool off, Adam pushed open the door. Even what he had seen on the video could not have prepared him for what now stood before him. There were rows and rows of cages. Some were against the wall, some were in the middle of the floor, some were stacked on top of other cages, and some were even hanging from the ceiling. They were all filled with... children. Adam felt sick as he realized the girl from the video was in a cage lying not three feet from him. There had to be over 50 children in cages. Every young eye watched Adam, and none seemed surprised that he was there. They looked more afraid than surprised.
Adam bent down to talk to the little girl from the video. "What's your name?" he asked nicely. The girl looked as if she didn't want to answer. "It's okay, I'm here to help you," Adam said. "Ashley..." the girl whispered nervously. "Well, Ashley," Adam said, his voice faltering when he noticed the scars and bruises all over her body and the tear-stains on her face. "I'm here to help you. We're gonna get you out of here." Adam lifted his head and raised his voice so that every child could hear. "We're gonna get you all out of here..."
Adam pulled the communicator Veronica had given him out of his back pocket. He pressed the talk button and hissed, "Send people here now, Big 'N' Salty's a pedophile. He's got children locked in his basement, and I think he's filming child porn. Hurry up, I want the fuck out of here!" And with that he shoved the communicator back inside his pocket.
Adam turned to the children again and said, "I'll be back, I promise." All of them just watched him with disbelieving eyes as he ran out of the room and shut the door behind him. As soon as Adam entered the room that led to the stairs, he found himself staring down the barrel of a semi-automatic shotgun. It was Winston. He aimed the shotgun directly at Adam's forehead.
And for some reason, he began to laugh. Adam gulped. All he had gone through, just to be killed by the damn driver. "So I bet you were wondering who set up that accident with the ferris wheel," Winston smirked. "Me. I know why you're here, Adam. And that was my way of stopping you."
"How do you know my name?" Adam demanded.
Winston laughed again. "Really want to know? I was alerted by the Master's nephew. He told me why you were here, and I was to make sure you didn't kill the Master. I almost succeeded, too. A few more seconds on that ferris wheel, and you would have died... Ah, well. Now I have the pleasure of killing you myself." Winston cocked the gun, ready to pull the trigger.
"Wait!" Adam called out desperately. "You're trying to save your master. If you kill me, there'll be an investigation. Not only will you go to jail, but your master will as well! He makes child pornos!"
Winston laughed again. "Not if they don't find any evidence. It's a big house, Adam. There are plenty of places to hide things. We ensured that when it was built. I'm the only one going to jail. And now, you die." Every muscle in Adam's body tensed. The time for reasoning was over. It was time to act.
Does Adam...
A) Dive at Winston's legs, try to trip him
B) Try to wrestle control of the gun away from Winston
C) Knee Winston in the balls
