At 6/14/06 07:23 PM, EmoNark wrote: One thing that bothered me though was the ending. You built up such a fantastic story with twists, suprises, and stuff, and we are given such a subtle-short ending (comparitive of the whole story) and it was a let-down; dissapoinment. (Although I loved the last paragraph).
What was it that bothered you? How I ended it, or how I kind of glossed over everything in the end? I'd been planning that Viper was gay ever since close to the beginning of this story. If you didn't like how brief it was, well, I don't really like the ending too much either. It was pretty shit, I had just finished writing the scene where Adam got in the helicopter, and I guess I was just in a hurry to end it.
At 6/15/06 06:20 AM, tlyer_durden wrote: one question was left unancerd who exzatally threatend all the elders to vote for adam to be guilty?
Lol, I guess I forgot to add that in... It was Viper though, just to piss Adam off.
At 6/15/06 01:47 PM, -Clone- wrote: The part where Viper kisses BNS is oddly familiar to a scene in the Boondocks.
Haha, that's kind of where I got it from. I was wondering if anyone would say anything.
At 6/16/06 05:27 PM, teh_ecks_bawks_hater wrote: Wow, readng through the first few parts sucked. All it was was constant 'wank off' scenes, which beefed up this thread byabout 15 pages. Later on, though, the story started to develope better; overall, I would probably give you a 7/10. It wasn't to good; repetitive; but eventually turned into a great story.
Yeah, I really hate the first part of the story. It sucks horribly. The constant wanking and meaningless sex was more of a devious ploy on my part to attract more readers to the story. Guess it worked, huh?
At 6/16/06 06:04 PM, -Syth- wrote: Do you have msn tantalus?
Yeah, get my email address from my profile if you want to talk.