Alright, I know I probably could've dragged out the end of the story a little more, but I pretty much knew how I wanted to end it, and I decided it was time. This story is over. If you've been with me from the beginning, thanks for your support. If you're just starting to read, have fun. I give you the breathtaking, heart-stopping, jaw-dropping conclusion to my sexy, action-packed bbs story. Enjoy.
Also, I'll take any questions/comments/consturctive criticisma you may have. Thanks!
Winston stood in front of Adam, pointing the gun at his forehead. Adam watched as he began squeezing the trigger. Winston stopped for a second, smiled, and said, "Any last words?"
Adam's only response was smacking the gun out of his way before the crazed driver could pull the trigger. The gun fired off into the wall. Adam took advantage of Winston's surprise and got in close so he could knee him in the balls. Winston fell down hard, holding his crotch. But he did still have the gun, and he aimed at Adam and fired again. Adam flung himself to his left just in time before the bullet tore yet another hole in the wall.
Adam got up, jumped on the driver, and kicked his gun out of his hands. Winston was still down. With satisfaction Adam realized he had definitely damaged the driver's boy-making ability. Adam savagely kicked winston in the nads again. Then in the face. Then in the nads. Then in the face. Then in the nads once more. Winston was a shriveled ball on the floor, whimpering to himself. Adam grabbed the gun that lay on the floor, but decided not to kill him. Instead he dragged the groveling driver into the room full of cages, and stuffed him into a large one nowhere near any of the children. Adam shoved him inside and locked the door. Winston didn't even fight back.
But as Adam turned to leave, Winston began crying. "Don't you hurt my Master!" he called out pathetically. "I... I... love him!" Adam kicked his cage as he left. He was a pathetic bastard. And apparently, a gay one, if he loved Big 'N' Salty.
Adam checked his watch again. He cursed and took off running as he realized it was nearly 1 AM. Viper would be at the front gate soon. Adam tore up the stairs, stumbling a few times. The time for discreteness was over. He didn't want to be late.
~
When Adam reached the front gate, Viper was already there, detonator in hand. "Hurry up, boy!" he hissed as Adam came jogging towards him.
"Long time no see," Adam muttered. Viper dismissed him, throwing something to him through the gate bars. Adam caught it and held it up so he could see it more clearly. It was a small device with a plug attached to one end. Adam realized it looked almost exactly like the one the guard had used to deactivate the ferris wheel's control panel.
"I stole it off a guard," Viper said. "It only works on things within the mansion's grounds. Now hurry up and plug it in, I want to finish this." Adam did as he said, and Viper simply pushed the gate open. Viper's jaw was set, and the look on his face grim. He turned to Adam, and tossed him the detonator. "Lucky for her you got here in time," he said. "Just tell me where that motherfucker is and you can leave. Contact your damn militia and tell them the job was finished."
In the distance they heard two gunshots. Krunk and the team were there. Adam paused a few moments before continuing. "Look, I don't know where he is," he said. Viper began walking towards the house, and Adam followed. "But can you at least tell me why you want him dead?" Viper smiled. "It's curiosity that killed the cat," he smirked. "Perhaps you should tag along. Once we find him, I think you'll understand why." They entered the house, leaving the front gate wide open.
Adam thought perhaps that Big 'N' Salty had taken advantage of one of Viper's children... That would be a reasonable explanation. But then again, things in Adam's life recently were never reasonable.
~
Adam and Viper made their way up the staircase to where Adam knew Big 'N' Salty's room was. Viper kicked open the door, and there was Big ‘N’ Salty, still asleep on his bed. He must have been a heavy sleeper, as he barely stirred when the door swung wide. Viper grinned widely as he saw Big ‘N’ Salty simply lying there. Standing off to one side, Adam was strongly reminded of one of those nature shows, with predator vs. prey. He was also surprised how Viper’s mood had changed so drastically. He didn’t seem angry any more, he seemed almost… happy… to get his revenge.
CONTINUED NEXT POST
Viper picked up Big ‘N’ Salty with ease by his collar and threw him across the room. That woke him up. Big ‘N’ Salty first saw Adam, which brought on the confusion, and then saw Viper, which brought on the fear. Whimpering pathetically, he backed himself up against the wall. Viper’s smile grew even wider.
“V-viper?” Big ‘N’ Salty whimpered.
“Yes, it’s me,” Viper responded laughingly. “Didn’t I tell you I’d be back? Didn’t I tell you I’d make you pay for what you’ve done to me? Didn’t I tell you I would kill you?”
The rapper sobbed pathetically, the tears falling freely from his face. “P-please, I’m sorry, give me another chance!”
Viper pressed his shoe against Big ‘N’ Salty’s throat. “You had your chance. You blew it. You betrayed me. And for that, you die.” Viper then lowered his foot. “But first… One last kiss.” And Viper did just that. He bent down and gave the crying rapper a long, sensuous kiss. Adam watched in horror.
“You guys are… gay?!” Adam blurted out. Viper turned to Adam. “I loved him more than you can understand!” he hissed. Then he turned back to Big ‘N’ Salty. “We could’ve had a life together!” he sobbed. “But no! You found someone else! And you kicked me out!”
Big ‘N’ Salty and Viper were now both crying together. “There was no one else,” Big ‘N’ Salty cried. “I was just tired of you… And besides, I was making enough money to make me rich. When I kicked you out, I had already earned half a million in a child porn ring.”
“I know!” Viper yelled, smacking Big ‘N’ Salty across the face. Viper then stroked the rapper’s face soothingly. “But I have seen some of your work, it’s quite good…” Adam was completely blown away. And he could only watch in shock as Viper pulled out his dick and forced it into Big ‘N’ Salty’s mouth. The rapper sucked on it willingly. And then Viper pulled out his gun. While Big ‘N’ Salty was still sucking his dick, he shot the rapper in his chest. Big ‘N’ Salty was dead.
At that point, Adam was too shocked to notice there was now someone standing next to him. It was the masked man. Big ‘N’ Salty’s nephew, the Commander’s son. He screamed. “You killed my uncle!” And rushed Viper with a knife. Viper simply ducked out of the way.
“Adam… I called for the hit. Me. Let your precious militia know they won’t be receiving payment,” Viper whispered solemnly. He then raised his gun, and… shot himself in the face. Viper had committed suicide. The masked man had no reaction. He simply looked at Adam as if he were seeing him for the first time, and said soberly, “He was crazy, you know.”
Adam could only nod as the masked man removed his mask. He did look a little like a younger version of the Commander. “My name is Jamal. And you know Big ‘N’ Salty was my uncle. He was crazy. He was mentally unstable. Viper took advantage of that. I know he’s done horrible things, but… he’s still my uncle. It wasn’t his fault. I could’ve helped him, but I didn’t.”
”Your uncle deserved to die for what he did,” Adam spat miserably. “Or haven’t you been down in his basement? Haven’t you seen what I’ve seen? There’s kids in cages down there. He’s a fucking child pornographer. He’s a crazy bastard. He could’ve done anything he wanted to them.”
Jamal held his head in his hands. “I know… I know. My uncle was easily led. I know what he did was wrong, but we can’t change any of it. But no matter what he did, he didn’t deserve to die. No one deserves to die. We could’ve gotten him mental help. Or something.” There was a slight pause before Jamal continued. “And about the ferris wheel thing… I’m sorry about that too. I told Winston to keep you from succeeding… I didn’t think he’d try to kill you.”
“Yeah, well, he just did, and I locked him in a fucking cage downstairs. I say we leave him,” Adam replied.
Jamal got up. “I’m sorry, Adam. I really am. I didn’t want you to get involved with this. But I have to go. Maybe I’ll see you again soon.” And with that, the no-longer-masked-man ran out of the room, leaving Adam alone with the corpses.
It really was an awkward situation. First of all, there was blood everywhere, and bits of Viper’s brain scattered on the far wall. Viper’s dick was still partly in the rapper’s mouth, and still half-flaccid. Big ‘N’ Salty’s eyes were closed. Adam suspected he did not feel it as he died, as there was no expression of pain on his face. Adam got up and left, no longer wanting to look at them.
CONTINUED NEXT POST
“Adam!” a voice called. “Adam! You dere, boy?” Adam walked down the stairs to find himself face to face with none other than Krunk. “Where’s Big ‘N’ Salty?” Krunk asked, a look of determination on his face. Adam merely pointed to the room he had just left. Krunk nodded and walked into the room, gun raised. Three seconds later, he walked back out, grinning.
“Already taken care of, huh, boy?” he asked. Adam smiled weakly. “Go get yo things, we needa get tha hell outta here.” Adam and Krunk ran up to his room, grabbed his stuff, and together they exited the mansion. Outside was a full team of militia agents, ready and waiting. “Let’s roll,” Krunk said, placing his hand on Adam’s shoulder.
“Wait,” Adam said. “That guy in there… with Big ‘N’ Salty… That was the guy who took Natasha. And I don’t know where she is…” Adam sat down on the paved driveway. Looking up at Krunk, he asked, “Is it over now? I just… I want to go home. I don’t want to do this anymore. Please… just let me go home.”
“You don’t have a home,” Krunk sighed. “You made an oath. You’re wit tha militia fo life, like it or not. I’m sorry, boy, but you’re comin’ back wit us. There ain’t nothin’ I can do about it.” And with that, Krunk heaved Adam off the ground.
“Krunk, Big ‘N’ Salty was a child pornographer. He has kids in his basement. Before we go… Can we at least help them?”
Krunk shook his head and kept on walking. “We can make a police call later. Right now we gotta go. We completed tha mission, now we leave. Soon, we get paid. That simple.” Adam didn’t bother to mention that Viper had called the hit in the first place.
As soon as they passed through the front gate, Adam, Krunk, and the team saw sirens. Krunk cursed aloud and signaled the team to draw their weapons. Ten police cars pulled up, and the police opened their doors and bent down behind them, guns raised. “Drop your weapons and put your hands where we can see them!” one shouted with a megaphone.
Krunk and the others did no such thing. Krunk pushed Adam behind him and said, “We ain’t goin’ peacefully. Now get yo asses out tha way, or we’ll make you get out tha way. Krunk fired one shot into the air, as a warning.
Then Veronica jumped out of the car. “Stop!” she screamed. “Kyle, come with us! We’ll protect you!”
Adam just stared. “I’m not Kyle Olims. My name is Adam. Please, Veronica, let us pass. We won’t have to hurt you if you don’t give us a reason to.”
It seemed no one had a response to that. After a few moments’ silence, out of nowhere, a helicopter appeared. Vance’s face appeared. “Hop in!” he shouted as a rope ladder was lowered. The team began climbing up the ladder, as the police simply watched. One officer began firing wildly at the helicopter, and the rest followed suit. The helicopter began to take off as Krunk started to climb up the ladder. Only Adam was left on the ground.
The ladder went higher and higher until it was almost out of Adam’s reach. He took one last look at Veronica, at the officers, who had now stopped firing at her command, and at Big ‘N’ Salty’s mansion. And he grabbed the ladder and began his climbing.
~
Once inside, he told Krunk and Vance everything. All about Viper, about Big ‘N’ Salty, Winston, Natasha, everything. Vance explained how simple it would be to track Natasha down by way of the detonator, and also said that Veronica could track him down by way of the communicator, and he should dispose of it before they returned to the hideout.
On their way back, true to his word, Vance discovered where Natasha was being held captive, and they freed her. Natasha practically jumped into Adam’s arms, and it remained that way until they returned to the hideout.
Before they got too close to Militia HQ, Adam pulled out his communicator again. “Hello, Veronica?” he said.
“Kyle… er, Adam, you… where…” her voice crackled.
“Look, just… make sure you free the children kept captive. The man in the cage, he’s insane. And, ask around for a little girl named Ashley. And tell her I said hi.” With that, Adam threw the communicator out the window.
~
Not long after, Adam found himself in the People’s court again. Natasha and Krunk had both testified for him, and the Commander was ready to give his verdict.
“In light of recent evidence, we are hereby dropping you of all charges,” The Commander said. “You are free to go, on the one condition that you never reveal our existence to a non-militia member.”
“But… where the hell am I supposed to go?” Adam asked.
“Home,” The Commander replied. “Or wherever else you feel like going.”
It was time for Adam to think. He really didn’t have a home anymore. And could he really return to school when he could live the life of an assassin, here at the militia? Could he even live a normal life now? Looking at the faces of Krunk, Natasha, and Vance… could he leave them behind? Could he leave his entire life behind? His normal life? Adam gritted his teeth and made the decision.
“Commander… I think you’ve got me for life,” Adam said, though still not as happy as he hoped he’d be.
“Alright, It’s settled then,” said the Commander, smiling. “You’ve proven your worth. You are now a full member of the militia!”
Krunk just grinned and clapped, remaining seated where he was. Natasha jumped up out of her seat and ran over to Adam, giving him a bear hug.
“If you’ll excuse me,” Adam began, “I’ve got to go to my room. There’s something I need to take care of.” Adam exited the courtroom alone, made his way down the familiar dank hallway and reentered his room. Adam laid down on his bed and had a long wank. It had been a while.
FIN
Questions, comments, criticisms welcome, as I said before.
Should make a sequel tantalus, that was a very good story
WOW. That was better then most real books ive ever read, and ive read a fair amount of books. You ended it perfectly in a way that still had me thinking about the story. If writing is your passion i really believe you could become a great writer. So you shouldnt stop writing because you know how to keep a story entertaining, descriptive, imaginative, suspensful and exciting all at the same time. And also, i was more attached to these characters then any others in any book. So let me know as soon as you can, or post it on here if youre going to make a sequel or not because it would make me so happy :).
This is one of the best web stories that I have ever read. You have a great talent with developing characters that people can relate to. You also were great at describing the action going on during the story. It was well thought out. 11/10 for you.
Now what you need to do is to get all of these sections into one huge document and put it on a web site or something. Illustrate it, make a comic out of it, flash movie, anything. Adding a visual aid to it would be awsome. You could do a lot with this story. I'd love to make this story into a flash movie, but Im not that good yet.
Take this story far my friend. And keep on writing. You could make a damn good career out of it.
Awesome! Seriously, I really can't criticize it. You knew where you were going and you executed it perfectly, unlike most "choose your own adventure" stories. I fivened it.
At 6/13/06 08:55 PM, DamianM wrote: So let me know as soon as you can, or post it on here if youre going to make a sequel or not because it would make me so happy :).
I am toying with a few ideas for a sequel. If I do start one, it won't be too soon, and it probably won't be an ABC choice thread. A lot of the time everyone chose the exact opposite choice of what I wanted, and it kind of screwed up the storyline in a few spots. But yeah, a sequel's possible.
At 4/8/06 11:05 PM, -Tantalus- wrote: Alright, last bump. If this leaves the first page and hasn't had any replies, then fuck it.
Can you believe he almost quit at the start!!!!!!!!
Great story, _Sisyphus_.. Oh wait its Tat something. Could you put it all into one, so I don't have to read amd search? I want to re-read.
So, apparently, I got banned for 3 days for having an opinion.
they should make that into a book...
well if they did i couldnt buy it cause it would be x rate....
but it was really good ...
umm lets see..
i really really liked the story and think you are a good writer the only reason this cant be made into a book is because it would be too porno ish and stuff
i mean sure a book can be bad but do you notice why they dont have a rating on a book..
mostly because there arent a lot of voilent books..
Wow, it's the end already? That's a very nice story, suspenseful and action filled. I look foward to the sequal.
Wow, fucking amazing. Best BBS story ever. Really great, loved it. You should set up a website and put it on/put it on your current site.
Wow, 3 nights of reading and I finally get to the end of this story. I loved it all they way through, you are one of the best writers I have seen. Seriously, publish a book. Even print this off and send it to a publisher, see what they say! You never know, and it wouldnt hurt. Good luck for the future!
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Wow... just 'wow'... i'm absolutely typeless...
That was just amazing; better than a lot of books I have read... publish it... you might become rich... It had suspense, action, drama, 'wanking', suprises and everything... this is just amazing...
It really comes to show you that life gives you choses... those choses have consequences whether good or bad... and I see this as a book that is aout that. Whether the chose of raping a girl would get you in a secret militia of black people and in six days you having to and witnessing many people die be possible in real life would be debatable, but I can say as a story meant to be wild, this is a work of art...
Another thing that I really choose to love was Adam's personality. He was a horny "sex-driven" son-of-a-bitch teenager with an eight inch cock who could be as wild as hell yelling "the pilot touched my weenis", but at the same time have feelings and some morals. He felt bad for Natasha because her dad raped her and felt... well as simplistic as it seams - felt feelings. Adam is a very complex character.
One thing that bothered me though was the ending. You built up such a fantastic story with twists, suprises, and stuff, and we are given such a subtle-short ending (comparitive of the whole story) and it was a let-down; dissapoinment. (Although I loved the last paragraph).
Overall, this is a great book of chose. Make it a real book and one more thing... 'wow'
Wow...just wow. You have so much writing talent that it is ridiculous. Even if you set aside the sexual references, wanking, and the hilarity that ensues afterwards, it's still an extremely good story. If you could make a sequel soon that'd be awesome. I've read all of the major books that are considered to be the best...and this story easily competes with them. Congratulations for making such an awesome story, i hope to begin reading the sequel soon. Thank you for providing me with a reason to live. I love you man
good story. You know your main audience well. however, if you want to be respected by the world, my suggestion would be NOT publishing this as a book. because
a.) you probably would not find many publishers wiling to accept it due to the *erm* verbosely graphic content
b.) If you do get it published, your main audience would be horny teenage boys looking for a good wank. The same audience you have on this website. Go figure.
You have a lot of talent in writing. You should put it towards a more meaningful result, rather than mindless sex and gore.
Thanx for a good story, nonetheless
jello out
Every compliment everyone has said I times it by 10! Make a sequel pretty please
to think it all started with rapeing a girl in the ass bro I thank you very much for wrighting this it took up a good 3 hours of my life but all 3 of those hours where worth it I got emerced with the story of adam and to think of all shit this thred has been through from the newbs telling you to hurry the fuck up but you cannot hurry up art bro this is art this is so much better then most bullshit halfassed storys I thank you bro and I ask that you make another one but one question was left unancerd who exzatally threatend all the elders to vote for adam to be guilty? once again I really apreachate you makeing this post and I would love to see another story from you with more killing and buttfucking but then again im a violent horny bastard but I did like the entire story I just dident like that you took out all the sex in the story but if you thought that the story was better without the sex then I totallly agree with you also thank you for forgiveing me for my lack of puction and spelling cuz I suck at that shit and I have one thing to ask you bro make sequeal or at least start another story you are a legond in my mind bro :)
At 6/15/06 02:41 AM, Ninjai000 wrote: win.
second, third, and fourthed
The part where Viper kisses BNS is oddly familiar to a scene in the Boondocks. Anyway great finish dude. That's an A++ in anybody's book. Good job.
I'm back. Call the Police
Who would've thought that Viper was gay? And some of us knew that Big n Salty was some kind of psycho like MJ earlier. But oh well. The story is done.
Nothing to say, just wow... Amazing story. SEQUAL PLX!
this just has to be the best story that i have ever read adn i ask of you this favor to make a sequal and aslo get an experienced flash artist to make a flash movie out of this then that would prolly be like in the top 10 portal entries adn i would like to thank you for making a story that was funny sexual and of course action packed thank you for making it.
Heh....the last part of the ending was funny.
Wow, readng through the first few parts sucked. All it was was constant 'wank off' scenes, which beefed up this thread byabout 15 pages. Later on, though, the story started to develope better; overall, I would probably give you a 7/10. It wasn't to good; repetitive; but eventually turned into a great story.
