Just decided to register to give you my thoughts.
First off, I don't believe in God, Jesus. And really don't like religion in a whole. But, I do not discourage people from believing in it because they do encourage some good morals. And have created some fantastic people, which the message you tried to portray through in your work and shows the type of person you are.
-Animation-: The style you went with in terms of animation was pleasing, but obviously you can do more to spruce it up. Such as more movement instead of still images, especially with the swords. Such as being stabbed one by one with possibly the letter she wrote being stabbed mid flight? It's a thought process, but you did a fine job with the style of animation.
-Art-: Simple. And I personally like it. The first parts of the animation are simple to understand and fill the mind on who or what the figures could be. Was one prince drop dead gorgeous and have a horrible personality? Or the other have a face of a Narwhal? It let's the imagination go. But, when you transition into the anime style (It was hinted it was headed that way, or I saw it coming) it sort of got rid of that mystery. In a good way. It fleshes out the picture and the happy ending. In general though, your art does need improving. Just general touch ups than anything else.
-Voice Acting-: I will be honest and say you do need work. You sound as if your simply talking silently to yourself than portraying a message to a group. I recommend having something to talk to. Put a stuffed animal or a cup in front of you and talk to it. It might seem silly, but so is voice acting when you are simply yelling into a microphone all alone.
As for your Mic quality, it also needs some work and needs to be more clear. But it's forgivable since not everyone has a studio quality mic.
-Music-: The music isn't memorable, to a point where I actually sat here going "Was there any music in this animation?" So I went back to listen to it again.
You did pick the right music, and the volume didn't go over your voice or distract from the story. That's all I got I've no real knowledge on music being plugged into stuff.
-Story/Message-: I didn't get your core message, at all. Like a lot of people I thought this was a sweet romantic deal. Not once did Jesus Christ enter my mind. Due to that I highly recommend doing research or studying from other's on how to portray a message better. Either visually, by sound, or other.
The story though was interesting to witness, but I personally was confused on some things. Which probably even enhanced the experience. Such as "Why is she being rejected? Are the princes just snobby or was there something wrong with the girl?" My imagination filled that hole. Which is probably for the better. If you listen to some people complain about the clone wars being realized in StarWars, then you might get my meaning.
Overall: It was good, not a masterpiece obviously(Not everything is, don't fret). I highly enjoyed the experience and encourage you to do more. YOUR message was not portrayed correctly, which is fine and can be worked on. Animation and art needs work but the style was great.
I hope you continue to do more. <3
wow, thanks for the thorough critique and review! :D
Looks lovely. From a visual standpoint, the silhouettes versus color, though a commonly-used style, does a good job conveying atmosphere.
The voice acting is alright. It could be worse (much worse), but it could be a little better. It seemed to lack power. Try speaking from your diaphragm more. It may add that needed "oomph".
The narration was fairly good, but I'd suggest you try editing a bit more in the future. Try more vocabularic variation, especially in sentences where you use the same word twice. This may just be a pet peeve on mine, but I think it would sound far better.
The symbolism is pretty clever. I've not seen that sort of interpretation before. So yay, originality.
The theme is not to my taste, but that's besides the point. Overall, I think that technically, this was pretty well done. So good job. 7/10.
wha? i was very confused at first, but you know what that was very gentle and meaningful in so many different ways...well u deserve some credit for it...after i read your explanation I have to admit you have an interesting analogy...but idk about you, I felt as though your message was a bit "forced" so to speak...maybe because of modern perceptions of religion, but nonetheless it was still a good plot :)
In regards to the animation, it was pretty good by itself, I liked the whole silhouette style, but the voice acting was not that great...I think it was because you said several unnecessary details like "she heard a knock on the door, and then went to the door to open it"...you could have said it a lot more creatively...this sort of thing kind of detracted from the whole experience as well, also adding to the "forced" feeling of the plot
Nonetheless a good effort, keep it up, one can only but improve if they keep their hearts and minds in the right place :)
The art style is cool. I like how you give it sort of a traditional anime style, but play with shilouettes in the beginning. Your voice acting isn't professional quality to be sure, but it's subdued and understated enough to the point where it isn't obnoxious or in anyone's face. As for the theme/story, not to my tastes personally, but it's a clever analogy, and I respect the execution.
I would express my disgust for your spoilers but "alexandernoot2013" explains what i want to say rather well so go read it yourself
thanks for the review anyways! :)