An excellent flash! Good animation, and story. My only issue is the one you noted yourself about the sound. The voice acting wasn't bad by any means, but the sound quality was a little hard to listen too, better equipment would fix that, else find a way to let the text tell the story for you so you don't have to actually narrate. Second is that I noticed a lot of grammatical errors that, when added to the rough quality of the sound, made it rather awkward to hear. Other than that, keep up the good work!