Good Start
I liked it, I just wish it was a bit longer. You should expand on this and build a story. Why is she Emo?
What does she do when she gets to school?
who are her friends?
Is she single?... Emo Girl is HOT!
Reviews for "Emo Girl"
carolshki27 responds:
hot, eh? ok ok. im doing part 2 but i guess i'll make another flash including both part 1 and 2 so that it could be longer..gah
If she were real....
I'd fuck her...
Shame she'd just slit her wrists when we were done...
If I didn't know she were emo, I'd swear it was because I'm such a terrible lay ;_;...
OH! right.... erm, voted 5! great first flash! >>;...
carolshki27 responds:
hahaha..xD
not bad
pretty good art and all. you have potential, but you didn't use all of it here. kinda shows what goes on inside the minds of depressed people though. kinda tough to read at times, but you can figure it out more or less. one thing though, you should have added the NG preloader, just to make it have a buffer for those on slower computers, and so it would'nt loop. i would have given you a higher score, but i think you probably could have made it a little better than this. or maybe you haven't really had flash that long...what do i know? learn a bit of simple actionscript (button functions, start/stop) and you can make great work with time. looking forward to your development as a flash artist!
carolshki27 responds:
thanks for the encouragemnt there but im still learning..hehe
Highly Impressive Inaugural Flash
While the lack of a preloader and replay button hinder it somewhat, it seems like plenty of people have told you that already, so just keep learning until you get those techniques down.
As for style, it was good and a bit more unique than usual, albeit rudimentary. If you were to practice on polishing it up just a bit, it would be beneficial.
The music flowed well, and fit the mood of the scenes., and sounds effects would be useless in this type of work.
However, the length of this piece negatively affects it. Were part two a bit longer, it would be great.
However, if this is your first entry, I am sure you will only make better and better submissions. I greatly look forward to the next batch of your work. Keep it up.
carolshki27 responds:
thank u..i will do my best next time
well...
for your first, it was really good. But it wasn't amazing for sure (congrats on underdog of the week btw) :) it was pretty short and the text was pretty hard to read. Don't get discouraged! You'll get better!