Reviews for Wyze - Tears of a Child

[InGenius]

Flow much improved

There are still a few points where you stumble a bit in pacing, "A mother on drugs..." was one point where you rushed out some words, I'm guessing because you couldn't quite hit the speed right and used a punch-in. You've gotten your flow down mostly, now it's time to work on rewriting tough passages to make them flow better, then work on laying in your adlibs and strengthening sections with seconds and libs. remember this game is all about evolving your weaknesses over time. You never stop improving.

On the mixing, the chorus/hook needed some strength, maybe a tiny echo and a second stereo widened. One of these days I really need to get the time to get you and Druid on track with your mixing. The vocals are a bit loud and forward, a smidge more reverb and backing off .1 to .3 dB on the vocal during the verse would help. The chorus is almost perfect volume.

As for the subject matter, good job on the writing. Very well written as a story, it conveys the image of the subject.

Peace

Blasphem-E responds:

Thanks for the words, and I will take you up on that mixing lesson.

[MC-Q]

im agreeing with IG on this

the thing you need to work on is just a little bit more pace. not alot though

and spicen up your verses with adlibs and make parts stand out more. And the courus was nice but just needed a little more push to get the point across

other then that i found it a nice track. Great subject and the beat fit it perfectly

Blasphem-E responds:

Thanks dude, I'l work on that

[mauiboynokaoi]

Nice song

You can really feel the strife of the kid in question. Thing is that this is actually quite typical these days especially among high school teenagers. These are actually my favorite kinds of songs. Lyrics kinda remind me of One by Mr Amazing XS but more pessimistic rather than inspirational.

@Codare: It's not about just saying stuff about sex drugs and violence. It's about the issued going on every day that no one chooses to acknowledge so the only way that people can get these issues noticed is through the arts. You really need to listen to the songs rather than just listening to a few words you don't like and judging. Though there are artists (especially in mainstream rap) that are all just about "bragging" about said sex drugs and violence, this is not that kind of music at all.

Blasphem-E responds:

Ya, he seems a little... dumb. :) Thanks for the review

[MarkusJesus]

Hahahahahaha

This would have been great:
a song with ACTUAL purpose and moral message.

but that voice sounds incredibly patronising, hahahahaha

This would probably pull off better as a read poem.

Blasphem-E responds:

Or just a better voice

[LoopDaLoop]

9/10 5/5

This defenitely is my favourite rap song from you. It's almost flawless. I heard this beat before on Shadowville, I knew it was around and you used it good, it fits with the lyrics.
I, in fact, think your voice is what makes this song better. They're some depressing lyrics and it wouldn't really help if someone with a hyped and agressive voice would rap this.
Also some lyrics in the authors comment aren't right. If you don't know what and cant find it pm me.

Keep doing this, and I hope to see another song like this in the top-20 soon. From you.

Blasphem-E responds:

I'm hoping to hit top 30 soon as well. As for the voice, that's one of the things I love, some people hate it, some people love it. I don't hate it as much as most people, but I recognize it has flaws, so I'm working at making it better.

I'll fix the lyrics myself. What I have there is what I wrote, but I change it a bit when recording.