Thats my new RP again it is not supposed to completely resemble the RP that was established it is simply a mini story I think that this piece was quite good. i think it is very detailed, i think i made it explosive like i said... Sorry about the dialogue though I dont really know your personalitys but when I was writing the mini stories i kept the same personality from b4 just mabye a little more developed sooooo if you would like me to change the personality i gave your char. just let me know soooooo yeah.