Clever...
I like the general idea, of the everyday guy being bummed out by his job, maybe a sequel to this would be able to explain what exactly happens after, as its kinda cliffer-hangered there, but with a decent "storm-off"
I also like your style of drawing, the dream was interesting and you could do so much more with this.
The ending... the ending. I should have a little additional scene like, after "End" appears just to show what he got up to. The thing with that... is it would have to be REAL good. 'cause like with this way.. idunno.. people can make an ending that satisfies themselves? Ahah ok that sounds pretty lame when I type it out.
Thanks
Good, but not enthralling
The picture you paint is not nearly bleak enough for him to rationally quit his job. If he is supposed to be sad, he doesn't seem to be. The fact that he is depressed about the girl... is all his fault and this story has no protagonist. For that reason, people will not have any emotional stake in this and leave without much of a feeling. Here's the plot: a guy is good at his job, but doesn't love it, so he quits to pursue a hobby. His emotional and mad rejection at the end does not follow a natural progression of anger that should have been built up. In order to fix this up for the contest, the only thing i think you can do is not have him quit his job and let him find the balance perhaps by adding a scene where he gives the girl or a kid a beautiful piece of origami.
I see...
Hm. I think what I ended up doing is making the whole of the story too personal to me. I did not show enough of who this character is, and I guess because people don't have a perfect understanding of the character they can't know why he acts the way he does.
Ya.. in terms of fixing it up for this film festival... idunno I don't think I could do it in terms of what you suggest. In the sense that I do not have enough time. I think this is more of something for me to remember for future projects.
Thanks for the review.
it was good...
it was ok but it was kinda borin..
Yar peoples have said it's kinda slow.
Something to think about for the next thing I make
Ummm...
You know those movies that you know COULD be good but aren't because they're drawn out? Yeah. That's what this is. And some music would've been nice...
:) I like it.
The concept is great. I love it. However, the animation could use some cleaning up, especially the dream-fight scene. I even had trouble making out the different soldiers at first. Once you get that squared away, it'll be 10/10 for me. Good job and good luck.