im sorryy man but
graet beat, great lyrics, alright, but, u cant rap for shit. just do wat everyone else does and hire a black guy hahaha. seriously though kickin beat and badass lyrics, just, u cant rap. dont b eat urself up about it though almost no white people can rap. except british people hahaha
actually, a lot of white people can. It just takes more practice and finding the right voice
Decent
I liked the lyrics. Good song overall.
Things I think that could be improved:
Your voice seems a little "light" I don't know how to really explain it other than it would be better if you "roughened" it up some. (If that makes any sence)
I also think that this song could use some better drums, or rougher beat overall. I realize where you are going with the loop in the background...I just think it would be better if the drums were stronger or more rough.
Ya, I get what you mean, been working at that a lot the last severa days with other tracks. My next few vocal tracks will be a lot better
Brace yourself for my intense review! ;)
Like the tune and sort of like the idea although its pretty depressing haha.
Maybe strengthen and roughen up the beat to give it more edge? Especially at the chorus.
And I agree with B-RadGfromOV- reckon you needa work on the rapping- sounds a bit ... hard to explain... but almost sarcastic/sneery or like its mocking its own lyrics a bit...
Try listening to Linkin Park/Fort Minor- I think it would do better with a vocal style slightly more like theirs, but that's just my opinion.
And I think you were a bit off time in the first chorus- second one was better.
Also I think some singing and harmonising accompanying the chorus- just in the background- would make it sound even more awesome tooo.
And lastly (hopefully you're not sick of all my criticism by the time youve got to this part!) I reckon it would be sweet if nearing the end, the vocals sort of got less and less and kinda distorted- like the chorus repeated itself except missing bits out e.g. '... tears of a child... teartears of a child....... tears..... of a child...' if you know what i mean!
Yup- so don't have to take my advice, but yeeah AWESOME WORK mate!
And hope I helped!
Keeep it upp :)
haha, I like a lot of ideas and constructive criticism. Thanks for the good review!
memories
heh its ok great lyrics,terrible singing but good enough for me to like it.
amazing idea here
haha, thanks for the review man
Nice.
Very, very nice song. Good work.
Thanks. Glad you liked it