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A Bid For Freedom

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Uploaded
Apr 20, 2009 | 10:28 PM EDT

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While you load, feel free to read these comments, and also check out the collaborators' sites down below for more great work.
Be sure to TURN UP YOUR VOLUME!
Questions about words? Please USE DICTIONARY.COM!
THANKS FOR YOUR REVIEWS! After receiving over 350, I CAN'T PROMISE I'LL RESPOND TO NEW REVIEWS! I'll try!

Here is the Newgrounds Flash version of "A Bid for Freedom".

It is a story that I wrote and converted into a small fable with images provided by the talented Nacho Rodriguez (who created Mr. Coo and won the #1 slot in Cold Hard Flash's Best Animated) and lush watercolours by his girlfriend Cecilia Deshayes.
It is an illustrated storybook, narrated for your pleasure by the debonair Andy Dennis, with guest turns by Sasuya and Josh "Tomamoto" Tomar you HAVE to hear!
The Storybook route was pursued so it could enter ReNaeNae's excellent Storybook Collab;
http://www.newgrounds.com/bbs/topic/1003968 Talents in writing, art, voice, sound, code etc. should give it a look!

To turn the pages, hover your mouse pointer over the bottom corner of the page, then left-click and drag the page across with your mouse until it fully flips over.
Narration starts on each page as you view it, but you're free to read at your own pace (you can right-click and select "Zoom In", then drag around to see all the fine details).

This story is NOT an attempt at hair-pin-bend trigger-happy balls-to-the-wall FBF hentai-maniac game-parodying shenanigannary. NO REALLY, IT'S NOT!
The power here is in the words and the pictures.
There is COMEDY, ACTION, DRAMA and ROMANCE, all skewed at odd angles.
There's fantasy, exotic locations, body odour, and even a fast car if you stick with it!
Have patience, we've many things to offer you. Stick with us. We're a good group.

Please vote and review showing respect to the combined talent and hard work involved in this Flash. A lot of passion went into this just for you guys, so be fair.
Critique, constructive criticism, suggestions, these are things we graciously accept.
If you vote or review abusively, you let Newgrounds down. Don't.
If this is "not your sort of thing" or you're somehow disappointed by the lack of animation, this is not the fault of anyone involved; no-one's forcing you to watch!

With all this in mind, we hope you enjoy (with your drink or snack of choice) our hard work, vote and review responsibly... and may your day be brighter.

For more awesome while you wait, check out:
www.mistercoo.com (Nacho's site)
http://ceciliadeshayes.blogspot. com (Cecilia's blog)
www.ediblecastle.com (home to Andy Dennis and his mate Will)
www.scarymarymedia.com (earlier collaborative efforts between me, a mate of mine and Nacho, including an award-winning short for the Marbella Film Festival)

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This section is for the creative people out there:

This has been a hot coal in my hands for quite some time, burning with collective passion, yet I've been reluctant to throw it into the fire.
Enough people are happy with the results as they stand for me to go forth and submit it.
Trust that this will blossom over time as we come back to better adorn this work.

My preliminary thanks are on this page:
http://www.newgrounds.com/bbs/topic/1049617/3

I additionally thank DrNeroCF for saving us in the coding department and Deathcon for further help; Joey Young (http://joeymofo.newgrounds.com) for providing sound effects at short notice and the Very Odd House (http://www.theveryoddhou se.com/) for a small snippet of lush score; and to Josh Tomar, introduced late into the project yet he delivered an outstanding performance within minutes of me asking him.
Further thanks go to the Newgrounds Team for their support of this work, and to all Newgrounds users who do the same (including Mr GUS, who is highly underrated: be sure to see his latest http://www.newgrounds.com/portal/view/483436 and vote for it in this year's Treasure Hunt).
Any other great participants that come to light will be remembered here equally.

Cheers!

Reviews


DJBobHoskinsDJBobHoskins

Rated 3 / 5 stars

I see what you were trying to do....

Good stuff! That page turning bit of actionscript DOES come in handy! It's nice to see it being used for something fun, for a change.

I see what you were trying to do. I'm afraid, however, the artwork was a bit amateur though. I work for a design agency and, although it's still good, we would never use anything quite so simplistic. I like the way the artwork was composed (using paint splatters here and there, the use of different media etc) but it didn't quite cut it for me. Its as though the artist fancies himself as a great illustrator but can't quite 'walk the walk'.

Sorry if this review seems a bit disappointing but I have to speak the truth. If I didn't then there would be no point having constructive criticism. I think the story is fine but the artwork MUST be improved upon.



eeckooeeckoo

Rated 2.5 / 5 stars

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I had a problem with this voiced novella. It felt far too superficial and pretentious, the large amount of high level vocabulary, some of which were used incorrectly, just did not fit with the imaginary plot-line and felt incongruous when placed next to metaphors like 'dancing astronauts' as well as alongside a child's storybook art style. The plot itself was ridiculous, non-sensical and too much of a mishmash (for lack of a better term) for it's own good. If this had been a flash animation, I would have been much less critical, but seeing that this seems to want to achieve something that would be considered 'higher level' than the average flash animation, the whole thing comes out as rather pompous to say the least.


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LunaticHiatusLunaticHiatus

Rated 2 / 5 stars

good effort

it seemed like the author of the dialog just used a thesaurus but didn't really know the actual meaning of any of the words which lead to a lot of nonsensical sentences to people who do know what those words mean. Along side of comments like "gripped me like a thigh master", which I assume was an attempt to be funny, just sounds like the author was trying to appeal to different audiences and failed at both.
The story constant wandering without any point just bored me and lead to me just skimming threw the pages.
I'm all for absurdism and the fantastic. However, even absurd things like Alice in Wonderland had concise movement, flow, thought process, etc. etc. This just seemed like someone was just writing down literally anything and assuming the idiot reader would watch it anyway because its there to be watched.



jebanu1jebanu1

Rated 2 / 5 stars

nice

this was good simply because i've never seen anyone emulate pages in a flash



ikechiikechi

Rated 1.5 / 5 stars

I didn't like it

i hated fliping the pages and it was a little boring but i give u points for creativity