At first I was YAY.......
Then common sense slapped me. I'm no one special and I mean nothing bad about this or what I'm going to say, just noticed it after I read it again.
1. (Yes, I have just enough things to say to have a reason to number them)
No page #'s?
2. The auctioneer's voice was not auctioneery enough, but I liked the description with the Gatling gun.
3. The speech with 9/11 reminded me of family guy. Laughed a little.
4. Why was there music on only 1 part?
5. He says he doesn't drink, but some how got alcohol poisoning? I can see how he got drunk from the fumes, I guess, but the auctioneer said he was sober.
6. If she stopped eating the fruit, then how did she have bad breath when he first met her.
7. On the picture of them on the chandelier, how is the light fixture hanging if they broke the roof above it. After all they had to break the roof above it to land on it.
8. There's no back-story of the main character. Maybe start him off at his apartment and bla bla bla blaaa.....
9. Why do we have to actually flip the book? Why not just click the little fold at the bottom to flip it, or like in other read-alongs, there's some jingle or something. Why not just forget about us flipping the page ourselves altogether, and just flip it when you want? I guess just put a pause button or slowing button. And yes I know how lazy this sounds.
10. It felt like the 80's or 90's. Not sure if you tube was around or even popular at those times.
11. Could have been cool if someone was actually stuck to the wallpaper in the picture.
12. She was the ONLY thing auctioned off?
13. The art looked great at first, but looking at it closer, it started losing it's flair. Don't know why.
14. Babs lived where before she met Kong?
15. Where did Kong go? SeQuEl. So this is how king Kong started. Even though he made a reference to the movie.
16. For the action part, she probably would have hit the ground before he even reached the vine.
17. I thought he was going to become the next Kong.
18. What's the moral, if there is one?
19. Loved the ending. Not sure what kind of humor that is called, but I write short stories with similar humorous endings.
20. This number really isn't a critique, but just did it to make an even twenty.
I liked the ending, and where you were going with the story. Couldn't tell if this was for children, teens, or adults. Love that writer's name, Adam Cook. A dam cook you are? There are other things that I can't really remember when I read it the second time, but I'm sure 20 is a good place to stop. Couldn't decide on 6 or 7 stars. Like the artwork, but loop holes aside, very good.
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