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While you load, feel free to read these comments, and also check out the collaborators' sites down below for more great work.
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THANKS FOR YOUR REVIEWS! After receiving over 350, I CAN'T PROMISE I'LL RESPOND TO NEW REVIEWS! I'll try!

Here is the Newgrounds Flash version of "A Bid for Freedom".

It is a story that I wrote and converted into a small fable with images provided by the talented Nacho Rodriguez (who created Mr. Coo and won the #1 slot in Cold Hard Flash's Best Animated) and lush watercolours by his girlfriend Cecilia Deshayes.
It is an illustrated storybook, narrated for your pleasure by the debonair Andy Dennis, with guest turns by Sasuya and Josh "Tomamoto" Tomar you HAVE to hear!
The Storybook route was pursued so it could enter ReNaeNae's excellent Storybook Collab;
http://www.newgrounds.com /bbs/topic/1003968 Talents in writing, art, voice, sound, code etc. should give it a look!

To turn the pages, hover your mouse pointer over the bottom corner of the page, then left-click and drag the page across with your mouse until it fully flips over.
Narration starts on each page as you view it, but you're free to read at your own pace (you can right-click and select "Zoom In", then drag around to see all the fine details).

This story is NOT an attempt at hair-pin-bend trigger-happy balls-to-the-wall FBF hentai-maniac game-parodying shenanigannary. NO REALLY, IT'S NOT!
The power here is in the words and the pictures.
There is COMEDY, ACTION, DRAMA and ROMANCE, all skewed at odd angles.
There's fantasy, exotic locations, body odour, and even a fast car if you stick with it!
Have patience, we've many things to offer you. Stick with us. We're a good group.

Please vote and review showing respect to the combined talent and hard work involved in this Flash. A lot of passion went into this just for you guys, so be fair.
Critique, constructive criticism, suggestions, these are things we graciously accept.
If you vote or review abusively, you let Newgrounds down. Don't.
If this is "not your sort of thing" or you're somehow disappointed by the lack of animation, this is not the fault of anyone involved; no-one's forcing you to watch!

With all this in mind, we hope you enjoy (with your drink or snack of choice) our hard work, vote and review responsibly... and may your day be brighter.

For more awesome while you wait, check out:
www.mistercoo.com (Nacho's site)
ceciliadeshayes.blogspot. com (Cecilia's blog)
www.ediblecastle.com (home to Andy Dennis and his mate Will)
www.scarymarymedia.com (earlier collaborative efforts between me, a mate of mine and Nacho, including an award-winning short for the Marbella Film Festival)

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This section is for the creative people out there:

This has been a hot coal in my hands for quite some time, burning with collective passion, yet I've been reluctant to throw it into the fire.
Enough people are happy with the results as they stand for me to go forth and submit it.
Trust that this will blossom over time as we come back to better adorn this work.

My preliminary thanks are on this page:
http://www.newgrounds.com /bbs/topic/1049617/3

I additionally thank DrNeroCF for saving us in the coding department and Deathcon for further help; Joey Young (http://joeymofo.newgroun ds.com) for providing sound effects at short notice and the Very Odd House (http://www.theveryoddhou se.com/) for a small snippet of lush score; and to Josh Tomar, introduced late into the project yet he delivered an outstanding performance within minutes of me asking him.
Further thanks go to the Newgrounds Team for their support of this work, and to all Newgrounds users who do the same (including Mr GUS, who is highly underrated: be sure to see his latest http://www.newgrounds.com /portal/view/483436 and vote for it in this year's Treasure Hunt).
Any other great participants that come to light will be remembered here equally.

Cheers!

Reviews


treacherous1treacherous1

Rated 5 / 5 stars

I really enjoyed that.

That was fantastic. Your facility with language is superb, and a few of your metaphors and similes genuinely made me chuckle. One thing I'd say is that you used a fair few British idioms and colloquialisms, which 90% of people watching your stuff will not understand. Things like 'chav', 'leg it', 'tipple' etc. But hey, I'm British, so no complaints from this corner. The only thing I wasn't hugely keen on was the ending. I felt that the punchline could have been better. The 'bitch chooses money in the face of what appears to be true love' thing is a bit cliched. But I'm only raising that point because, as an author, you probably want some constructive criticism with your praise.

All in all though: awesome. More of this, please.


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AdamCook responds:

As you're currently saying in your Profile Comments; "Life is a joke with a really bad punch-line."
It could have been a lot better, but so far it's been a hit! It's kind of one of those sitcom set-ups that I used to love as a kid, so I guess it's in my nature; I'll try for better endings in my future projects!

Glad to get a young Brit seeing this; you're right that a lot of people wouldn't normally get this, but I hope that if they're interested, they'll look up any words and expressions they don't know and get involved in a whole new culture! We should all try to expose people to exciting new things more often!
You've obviously got a great understanding of writing and a real sense of humour - I'm happy you enjoyed the story!

Thanks for your excellent review! We'll definitely strive to deliver more great stuff in the near future!


DJBobHoskinsDJBobHoskins

Rated 3 / 5 stars

I see what you were trying to do....

Good stuff! That page turning bit of actionscript DOES come in handy! It's nice to see it being used for something fun, for a change.

I see what you were trying to do. I'm afraid, however, the artwork was a bit amateur though. I work for a design agency and, although it's still good, we would never use anything quite so simplistic. I like the way the artwork was composed (using paint splatters here and there, the use of different media etc) but it didn't quite cut it for me. Its as though the artist fancies himself as a great illustrator but can't quite 'walk the walk'.

Sorry if this review seems a bit disappointing but I have to speak the truth. If I didn't then there would be no point having constructive criticism. I think the story is fine but the artwork MUST be improved upon.



SoldatoflifeSoldatoflife

Rated 4.5 / 5 stars

A mix of many to combine but one

Visually, as I went from page to page, the quality of the images kept me interested to the narrative as time passed by. It was just enough cartoonish, with a tad of realism mixed within. I could easily see this as something I'd find at the nearest book store in terms of quality. The close up of the girl near the end, when they are in the pond, it felt a bit rushed drawing wise, but in general, it was well balanced and pleasant to simply gaze upon. If you could make the text more readable, it would help a bit, in case someone is better at reading than listening.

The audio throughout was emotionally imprinted and well synchronized with the turning of the pages and what was going on in the book. I've heard only few audio books, but the person that read out the text seemed very comitted and interesting to listen to.

The text itself had a few quirks in terms of localisation, depending on who tries to understand it, but all in all, I understood most of the jokes and quirks (Quebecer here that's lived all over Canada). It almost sounded musical the way the text was written and often forced the tone of the voice to be cynical. I guess it still comes with the localizaiton and whatnot.

Mix everything together, and I'd say you deserve a 9 out of 10. Minus 0.5 for a few drawings I found just a bit lacking compared to the others (lady close up at pond) and the too small font size (minus 0.5), probably caused by the flash compression or size formating.

Thanks for the fun e-book/flash submission, audio storybook and good luck with your professional life. That and good night, as it's way passed my usual bed time. I blame 30-40 minutes due to your submission and me writing this!

Cheers!

P.S.: I'm not revising my text as I'm too sleepy ^^


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king-of-clownsking-of-clowns

Rated 5 / 5 stars

whoa

bravo tre bien this was quite enjoyable. i pray you make equally great flashes again soon


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AdamCook responds:

I'm happy you enjoyed it! Hope to answer your prayer in the near future - I'll keep you posted!


TheDarkDealerTheDarkDealer

Rated 4 / 5 stars

Sorry for the 8

Well, this was a pleasant surprise. The voices were perfect, the art stunning, and the idea sound. I found the page dragging a bit annoying, but it was a good concept. It's just that, while the humor was compelling, I just feel that you had so many good effects and production value, and you had to go and make it anti climatic. Ah well, 5/5


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