Hey, Myst. I considered what you said and since I'm not sick anymore (still stayin home from school though! :-D) I think I'm ready to join the WG!
At 11/22/04 11:58 AM, Frozen_fox wrote: Thanks. Your last one was good but I wasnt to keen on all the lines ending the same......to many ee endings for my liking.
Thank you.Just thinking of Strict rhyming and I really like that one hehe.
When we were togather.
When we were together
My life had meaning.
Now that we're apart
I have nothing to live for.
When we were together
I felt like I could do anything
Now that we're apart
I'm no longer sure.
When we were together
My life was at its peak.
Now that wer'e apart
My heart feels so weak.
When we were together
I had many things to say.
Now that we're apart
I can no longer speak.
Hi, this is my first actual piece and it needs work but so far this is what i got. My friend was joking about the matrix so I thought I'd make it into a script, this is what I have done so far.
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Self-help
(The scene opens revealing a community center, above the door there's a sign saying, "Alcoholics Unanimous!" The camera goes through and reveals a bearded man wearing hippie styled clothes named Bob.)
Bob: Hi folks! Now we all know why your here, because your a group of boozers. But I'm here to fix that, k? Now whatever has happened to you has happened to me. From binge drinking to making love to a bottle of beer. Lets start with you (Bob points to his side)
(The camera pans round to reveal agent smith)
Smith: Hello, I am Agent Smith.
(The camera pans around again to reveal a cemi-circle of agent smiths)
Agent Smiths and Bob: Hi Agent Smith.
(camers pans back round to agent smith#1)
Agent Smith: And I haven't had a beer in two days.
(The agent Smiths and Bob clap.)
Bob: Ok, now you. (Bob points to the Agent Smiths left to reveal Agent Smith#2)
Agent Smith#2: Hello, I'm Agent Smith.
Agent Smiths and Bob: Hi Agent Smith.
Agent Smith #2: And I haven't had a martini for a month.
(The Smiths and Bob clap again.)
Bob: Good, good, now you. (Points again)
Agent Smith #3: Hi I'm Agent Smi-
(Agent smith#3 is interupted by Neo.
Neo: (Fidgeting and twitching) Am I the only one here on crack?!?
Bob: Down the hall, to your left.
Neo: Thankyou. (Looks at the snack table) Look it's Trinity naked!
(Neo points to the window and they all look. Neo steals the sweets off the table) Hehehe, suckers. (Neo runs out the room)
END SCENE
At 11/22/04 12:59 PM, -Shadowed_Ninja- wrote: Hi, this is my first actual piece and it needs work but so far this is what i got. My friend was joking about the matrix so I thought I'd make it into a script, this is what I have done so far.
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Hehe I laughed as I read it,that was good hehe
At 11/22/04 01:03 PM, LordSkeletor wrote: Hehe I laughed as I read it,that was good hehe
Thanks, that's my version on my friends although people say mine is funnier, I guess I'm just a funny guy. I also had the idea once about having a MC Hammer "Can't touch this!" bullet dodgeing, music video.... but I think not...
Hey check back at the World Of Roleplay will ya im getting a bit bored :P
Nothing is happening in WOR :'(
I didn't get to say Good bye.
It seems like only yesterday,
That you left me all alone,
But in reality, so much time has passed,
Since I've been on my own.
I don't know where to go,
I don't know what to do,
I feel all alone in this world,
Since I'm without you .
Cause I didn't get to say goodbye,
Didn't get to tell you I loved you,
Didn't get to see you one last time,
And now you're gone.
I didn't get to thank you,
And now I wonder why,
It feels so lonely and empty here,
Cause I didn't get to say goodbye .
I guess I'm getting along all right,
The world runs by so fast,
But time seems to drag by so slowly,
I don't want it to last.
I'll sit here writing at night,
Wondering why I'm even alive,
And I'll cry cause I miss you so much,
Sometimes I want to die .
I know you're up above,
Watching over me,
But that just isn't good enough,
I want you here with me.
I know I can't have that wish,
It would be too good to be true,
Even though you're in a better place,
I still miss you.
I know you can hear me.
So I have a few things to say:
I'll always love you,
Even though you're far away.
Wait for me in Heaven,
But until I die,
I want to say what I never got to tell you,
I love you...goodbye.
And now you're gone.
A rather morbid and disturbing poem by me.......:\
Learn to fly
Hush My child and don’t be afraid.
Today is just like any day.
Just because your mommy and daddy are gone
Doesn’t mean your all alone
The nice man down stairs will help you make friends
He will take you to a place where you can pretend
That your family is real and alive and well
Instead of burning down in hell.
Hush now child and don’t say a word
Or the Boogie man will come when he has heard
Of what you did last night.
I’m sure it wasn’t your fault that everything went wrong.
Oh my child now don’t you cry.
Put on a brave face and pretend you can fly.
What’s that you don’t want to pretend?
Then maybe we can help you learn
Shall we take you up to the roof and make you flap your wings?
Shell we give you lift off and see if you hit the ground?
Poor little child seems you cant fly.
I guess we will just leave you in the snow to die
Please little child when you awake
Tell God that your life was a huge mistake!
You know what I liked it lol >:)
Here's another one
We're keeping afloat
Hanging around this sinking ship, how'd this start?
you're breaking down, and you're falling apart
Splinters of you in my skin
apart of me now, you're breaking in
Let's recover that old treasure chest
grab our memories and burn the rest
Dusting off reminders is an act so jaded
looking back at a picture now faded
So I'll rebuild you one more time
commit just one more crime
Piece by piece I put you back together
out alone in this stormy weather
I show you my weakness
but through your eyes I'm speechless
So close those eyes, enjoy the ride
and imagine the things we'll learn tonight
"We're keeping afloat." Yeah you might be right
but everything seems so black or white
So open those eyes, see the grey
I've boarded a lifeboat, and floated away.
ooooo nice one.... i seem to be fascinated by morbid things at the moment for some reason...thsi one isnt as morbid as the last one though.
Reaper Man
The figure stands in front of the moon
Standing juts standing.
Scythe in hand
Standing just standing.
Figure moves along the floor
Moving just moving.
Moving slowly nothing more.
Moving just moving
Figure swings its skeletal arms.
Swinging just swinging.
Scythe come crashing down on bed.
Swinging just swinging.
Muffled scream heard aloud
Screaming just screaming.
Screams echoes all around.
Screaming just screaming
Reaper walks to window.
Reaper disappears
Silence just silence
Nothing is heard
Alot of poems.. it seems i have spread a desease.
Welcome ImmortalLight : )
Most the poems were well done... you guys get better with everone.... except fox...
Just fudgin wit ya.
Anyway... I am just checkin in... i love how this place had livened up ever since i convinced you two to try poetry. I cant keep up...
At 11/22/04 03:52 PM, Myst_Williams wrote: Alot of poems.. it seems i have spread a desease.
Welcome ImmortalLight : )
Most the poems were well done... you guys get better with everone.... except fox...
Just fudgin wit ya.
You better had be I was actually trying with the ast two. They actually took longet than 3 minutes to write >:-(
At 11/22/04 03:52 PM, Myst_Williams wrote: Alot of poems.. it seems i have spread a desease.
Welcome ImmortalLight : )
Most the poems were well done... you guys get better with everone.... except fox...
Just fudgin wit ya.
Anyway... I am just checkin in... i love how this place had livened up ever since i convinced you two to try poetry. I cant keep up...
My friend, called TT, "recites" poetry, his latest art:
I love Bill
Bill loves Bob
Bob loves corn
Corn on the cob.
Thankgod I prefer scripts, check the one I did earlier, only one person said anything and I need feedback!
You two are a hoot....
and they are all good... ui dont want to go critiquing each one right now... im doing homework and trying to RP at the same time. Stop stressin me out... im going crazy... im gonna flip....
lol.. okay, im alright... i just need a few seconds of lonesome time.
"Breath in... breath out... breath in... breath out."
Didnt help any....
At 11/22/04 04:06 PM, Myst_Williams wrote: "Breath in... breath out... breath in... breath out."
Didnt help any....
MWAHAHAHAHA!!!!!!!! And to make things worse for you Im going to do more :P its a ghood thing yuo started telling me to write poetry cause I need to write some poems for my English Lessons!
At 11/22/04 04:09 PM, Frozen_fox wrote:At 11/22/04 04:06 PM, Myst_Williams wrote: "Breath in... breath out... breath in... breath out."MWAHAHAHAHA!!!!!!!! And to make things worse for you Im going to do more :P its a ghood thing yuo started telling me to write poetry cause I need to write some poems for my English Lessons!
Didnt help any....
I am glad to be of service.
Dont you just love poetry now?
An art that every writer must learn, but shall never perfect.
At 11/22/04 04:25 PM, Myst_Williams wrote:
I am glad to be of service.
Dont you just love poetry now?
An art that every writer must learn, but shall never perfect.
lol. The art that i must learn is the art of typing.......I keep on making typos....grrrrr........I hate my keyboard.
If it is RPing.. i always proof read what i type real quick. Then again, i always get caught with ppl posting over me... so then i have to improvise.
At 11/22/04 04:39 PM, Myst_Williams wrote: If it is RPing.. i always proof read what i type real quick. Then again, i always get caught with ppl posting over me... so then i have to improvise.
lol I do a quick scan most the time but I never really proof read it unless its REALLY long.
Why isn't anyone giving me feedback on my script? Man this is depressing...scuse me while I throw myself off a bridge. I have homework first though, damn. Forget the throwing off the bridge thing but please help my writing by telling me about my script, please
At 11/22/04 04:45 PM, -Shadowed_Ninja- wrote: Why isn't anyone giving me feedback on my script? Man this is depressing...scuse me while I throw myself off a bridge. I have homework first though, damn. Forget the throwing off the bridge thing but please help my writing by telling me about my script, please
errrrr....hang on lemme find it and Ill ahve a read :P
Wait there is my bad......crap I cant post Damn that 4 repies per thirty minutes! *Shakes fist*
I just did a couple new posts in WOR! I will find the script too later tonight.
At 11/22/04 04:49 PM, Frozen_fox wrote:
errrrr....hang on lemme find it and Ill ahve a read :P
lol i read it. That was quite amusing :P/ Youve got a good sense of humour it seems. I can treally think of any way to improve it. You seem good at thinking up jokes think you can come up with a few jokes inviolving strawberry clock and Bedn? im writing a script for a wizard if Oz flash and I need more jokes for one scene and I cant think of any.
At 11/22/04 04:55 PM, LordSkeletor wrote: Wait there is my bad......crap I cant post Damn that 4 repies per thirty minutes! *Shakes fist*
lol! I know... i hate that rule. Why is that a rule anyway? I dont understand it.
At 11/22/04 04:57 PM, Myst_Williams wrote:At 11/22/04 04:55 PM, LordSkeletor wrote: Wait there is my bad......crap I cant post Damn that 4 repies per thirty minutes! *Shakes fist*lol! I know... i hate that rule. Why is that a rule anyway? I dont understand it.
Well I guess its to stop spammers spamming up soooo much for example OLDMEN he trys too hard...........And I can post now and Ive just posted :) back to RP
I cant post in WOR either.... : (
as soon as i can i will post what i had ready.
At 11/22/04 04:56 PM, Frozen_fox wrote:At 11/22/04 04:49 PM, Frozen_fox wrote:errrrr....hang on lemme find it and Ill ahve a read :Plol i read it. That was quite amusing :P/ Youve got a good sense of humour it seems. I can treally think of any way to improve it. You seem good at thinking up jokes think you can come up with a few jokes inviolving strawberry clock and Bedn? im writing a script for a wizard if Oz flash and I need more jokes for one scene and I cant think of any.
Thankyou, comedies my thing. All my friends think I'll be a comedian when I'm olderr so I gotta keep practicing. I'll check out you're script and might... Seánify (Seán is my name) it. I'll see what I can do...
