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Need some criticism. Sep. 9th, 2010 @ 05:36 AM Reply

Something i drew yesterday, so what do you think ? ^^

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Response to Need some criticism. Sep. 9th, 2010 @ 06:02 AM Reply

i dont even get what that is :|


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Response to Need some criticism. Sep. 9th, 2010 @ 07:16 AM Reply

At 9/9/10 06:02 AM, Peglay wrote: i dont even get what that is :|

who really cares what it is, you can critique it none-the-le- what the hell IS that?

Let see, the main problem I can see is that it's way, way too sketchy for something that's tried to be in the "epic" line. Everything, I can see the individual scribbles and how you've managed to pass it off, and it hasn't worked. I'd advise trying to put more effort (ie doing it carefully, trying to simulate the shapes instead of the lines) into your lineart and cleaning it up.

The other thing that seems out of place is the words - they don't seem to fit in, period, and I doubt you could pass them off anyhow - they don't really fit ion with the visual medium. I'd say to get rid of them.

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Response to Need some criticism. Sep. 10th, 2010 @ 04:13 PM Reply

an eagle i drew a while ago

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Response to Need some criticism. Sep. 10th, 2010 @ 04:15 PM Reply

a little monster that likes to scratch itself, maybe a little to much.

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Response to Need some criticism. Sep. 14th, 2010 @ 12:19 PM Reply

Dark soul

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Response to Need some criticism. Sep. 14th, 2010 @ 01:50 PM Reply

I feel that color would help your cause. I get the whole "why do words hurt" thing and I love that, but, having so many words on the page distract me from figuring out what is in the middle, the focus of the drawing. By coloring in certain things and removing some of the "WORDS", you'll find a more clean, attractive piece of work. Nice eagle too.

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Response to Need some criticism. Sep. 14th, 2010 @ 02:19 PM Reply

alright thanks for the advice :D I'm actually working on a better version of "Why do words hurt" :)

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Response to Need some criticism. Sep. 14th, 2010 @ 02:19 PM Reply

I assume its something to do with Alice is Dead 3, am i right?

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Response to Need some criticism. Sep. 14th, 2010 @ 02:23 PM Reply

Nope, i draw it from imagination ^^

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Response to Need some criticism. Sep. 14th, 2010 @ 02:26 PM Reply

i see improvement in your work, keep it up :D


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Response to Need some criticism. Sep. 14th, 2010 @ 03:24 PM Reply

At 9/14/10 02:26 PM, Peglay wrote: i see improvement in your work, keep it up :D

Thank you :) Here's another picture of darkness ^^

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Response to Need some criticism. Sep. 15th, 2010 @ 12:52 AM Reply

I feel like this picture would be better drawn. I understand that hands are really hard to do but you seem to be able to handle that well. My main concern with this one is the blackness that the person is holding. I think it's a liquid but it doesn't seem like it. It feels thick. I know that's kind of hard to understand but liquids flow. It is possible to flow with a computer but I think if you sketched it out first, you could better grasp how to make it seem like it's flowing. Possibly watch some commercials on youtube of facial cleansers, they tend to have water flowing through hands. I really like this and I think a painting of it would be cool. I think you'll be able to make some pretty extraordinary things.

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Response to Need some criticism. Sep. 15th, 2010 @ 12:55 AM Reply

Now that I look at this again. I feel it might be someone's soul. Heavy with guilt, grief, etc. If it's suppose to be like the man with the darkness coming out of him (like a smoky type of thing) wisps of black smoke around a larger bundle of smoke would work better. I know I'm probably reading into this way to much so I'll shut up..........for now.

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Response to Need some criticism. Sep. 15th, 2010 @ 11:01 AM Reply

hihi, im just glad for the advices. Always looking to draw better :)

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Response to Need some criticism. Sep. 15th, 2010 @ 01:51 PM Reply

Tear your pain out

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Response to Need some criticism. Sep. 15th, 2010 @ 02:07 PM Reply

At 9/15/10 01:51 PM, Marklikeart wrote: Tear your pain out

i like these new ones.
the contrast is good.
the lines are too squigly though
it looks a bit sloppy.


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Response to Need some criticism. Sep. 15th, 2010 @ 02:20 PM Reply

thanks :) I just started using a tablet and im a bit shaky ^^

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Response to Need some criticism. Sep. 15th, 2010 @ 02:22 PM Reply

At 9/15/10 02:20 PM, Marklikeart wrote: thanks :) I just started using a tablet and im a bit shaky ^^

I like your new work, keep it going :D
Oh and what tablet do you use?


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Response to Need some criticism. Sep. 15th, 2010 @ 03:00 PM Reply

aiptek slim tablet 600U II, not the best but it works for me. Dont have so much money at the moment ^^

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Response to Need some criticism. Sep. 15th, 2010 @ 03:55 PM Reply

Break free

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Response to Need some criticism. Sep. 15th, 2010 @ 03:57 PM Reply

Break free but in color, like it more in black and white tho

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Response to Need some criticism. Sep. 15th, 2010 @ 05:27 PM Reply

At 9/15/10 03:57 PM, Marklikeart wrote: Break free but in color, like it more in black and white tho

try cleaning up the lineart, making it smoother, itll make it look a whole lot better
also try some basic shading, doesnt have to be anything fancy just establish a light source

last thing, i see some color overflow, and bits of white inside, use a hard brush, not a soft brush, itll make it easier to color inside the lines

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Response to Need some criticism. Sep. 15th, 2010 @ 05:49 PM Reply

At 9/15/10 03:57 PM, Marklikeart wrote: Break free but in color, like it more in black and white tho

i agree i like it better in black and white.
but that's just because you haven't got color down 100%
and that can prove to make your work look childish


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Response to Need some criticism. Sep. 15th, 2010 @ 05:55 PM Reply

I would add color. It looks like you have a decent sense of space and anatomy, but don't add this cell shading bullshit. Keep it sketchy.


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Response to Need some criticism. Sep. 15th, 2010 @ 05:56 PM Reply

At 9/15/10 05:55 PM, DemocracyFTW wrote: I would add color. It looks like you have a decent sense of space and anatomy, but don't add this cell shading bullshit. Keep it sketchy.

maybe even some traditional??


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Response to Need some criticism. Sep. 15th, 2010 @ 06:12 PM Reply

At 9/15/10 05:56 PM, Spac3case916 wrote:
At 9/15/10 05:55 PM, DemocracyFTW wrote: I would add color. It looks like you have a decent sense of space and anatomy, but don't add this cell shading bullshit. Keep it sketchy.
maybe even some traditional??

Oh, I thought that was implied. I add that too.


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Response to Need some criticism. Sep. 15th, 2010 @ 06:29 PM Reply

At 9/15/10 02:31 PM, threadwood wrote: the last few look like you may have just traced some photos and added black shapes. i think your first post was more interesting than those.

I'm not tracing, but i am using myself as a reference.

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Response to Need some criticism. Sep. 15th, 2010 @ 11:44 PM Reply

I love this sort of thing.
Were you just doodling and it turned into this bizarre piece or did you have it in mind previous to drawing it?
I think a little more time could've been spent on detailing, but as far as it is right now, it's pretty cool.

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Response to Need some criticism. Sep. 16th, 2010 @ 05:15 AM Reply

At 9/15/10 11:44 PM, Spaghetti14 wrote: I love this sort of thing.
Were you just doodling and it turned into this bizarre piece or did you have it in mind previous to drawing it?
I think a little more time could've been spent on detailing, but as far as it is right now, it's pretty cool.

I come up with a basic idea and then it just turns out like this ^^