Not at all bad for a first
Same as the previous guy said. Good plot, but needs more time spent on the graphics. Keep it up!
Reviews for "Mathew"
Dark182 responds:
Okay, I'll do that next time.
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good story line... but i can make better graphics on powerpoint.. this was good for your first movie i admit... but you need to use motion tween a litte more and use more frames for the people... but good job man i kinda liked it.. the music was kool
Dark182 responds:
Thanks man! yay I've been doing all that latly and stuff.. im getting better, just takes practice i guess.. but thanks for the feedback
Not bad.
See here's the deal, I am a critic, I don't make flash movies, therefore I don't know or care about any flash techniqes that could make your movie better. My advice is to work on you animation, cause it really, and I mean really sucks. However I will give you credit for acctually trying instead of just doing those stupid fucking stick figures. You have a good vision, just work on you animation and you have the potentail make a truly great movie.
Dark182 responds:
Thanks. Right now I'm working on getting better but it's just taking some time.
yoyr almost there.
work on your animation. make things smoother, and use layers and take your time. it is a great story and i dont expect your characters to have voices b/c it is hard to get a mic. so i understand that, but your motions and such do need work. your sound was very wel put together though. and one more thing, try to have more motion more of the time, trust me. people like to see movement so give it to them. keep it up and just do your best dude!
-matman-
Dark182 responds:
Yah, thanks for the review and for the tips ( and for not just saying "Omgzz, you suck so much ass.. rofl newb, eat my shit" or something liek that)
Its ok for 1st flash
I saw a couple of errors in your flash.
1) At the beginning when you want to immitate the guy walking ur picture goes off frame since all u do is bring it up and down (try using different layers and to draw over the edge a bit but it can be a little tricky since you wont really know where the page ends)
2) When the guy is walking the pavement dissapears (Layer problem again)
3)Learn how to make them walk a little more realistically (Practice)
4)Pratice and one day you'll become a very good artist but takes a loads of time and patients. Also i suggest you jog down your ideas and characters on paper first since it will give you a head start on not drawing something you dont want later on.
Keep on getting better and next time ill give you a better score. :)