Dear Personnotstudying
I have to admit, I wasn't expecting much out of this animation at the start. However, it slowly became a wholesome little romp through the relationship those two shared. I have to admit it was rather cute! I'm impressed and would love to see more. I do have a criticism though, the thing stopping this from getting 5 stars from me.
That would be the lack of sound effects throughout the animation. Sure you had music, and notably during that explosion when they bumped shoulders, but the rest of the animation was rather devoid of sound. Besides of course the future funk you had playing (which I did enjoy) A good example of where sound effects could be used, would be at 00:06, I had no idea what was going on, until it panned out to reveal it was CJ cleaning her suit. Maybe add a glass wiping noise to signify whats going on? For another example, at 3:40 you play a glass wiping sound effect, so I am confused why you wouldn't earlier as well?
My last point of crit would have to be the mic volumes and quality. Marks mic is not only worse quality, but sometimes he is noticeably quieter than the rest of the cast. As you may already know, Audacity is great for editing volume and if you aren't already using it, I recommend it for future animations.
Overall, however, the concept, as well as the execution was charming! I can't wait to see what else you will produce in the future. Maybe even a followup of this story? Personally, I found the ending to be sad because I wasn't sure where the relationship was going to end up, seeing as though they were being separated.
For the cuteness, overall wholesome plot, and for the artistic style (which is honestly fabulous) you get 4 stars from me. I am going to give you a follow and I can't wait to see how you improve!
-Warmest regards
Timeattack
p.s. If you ever want some crit you are free to hit me up in the Newgrounds messages. I would love to check out your animations and provide any feedback I can :)