JordansFilms1...
I seriously wish that newgrounds reviewers were more like you. There is nothing wrong with giving someone a low score if you don't like it. But a BAD review is if you don't give a legit reason, or give no constructive criticism and still give a game or animation a bad review. However, even though I think you were a little harsh with the score, you have probably did the most impressive review I have ever saw on newgrounds. I take my hat off to you.
Changes from TTA
In the original TTA, it seemed like there was more focus on either the story or the characters, never both simultaneously. I'm afraid you're falling into the a similar pattern with TOME, and yet... it flows better in this series somehow because of this second episode. Maybe it's because it's now fully animated and the voice acting isn't at the end of a "season" or exclusively for the movie, which I admit is somewhat shallow, but it genuinely works.
Even though I didn't like Nylocke's character change, he's starting to grow on me a little more with this second episode. Nice touch there, Kirb. Speaking of you, again, your author avatar is, again, very felective of past experiences with flash animation or your own life in general, which I like. Again, Gamecrazed is the best character in the episode: very enigmatic yet you do get a feeling of he's really like. Same can probably be said the villains.
Sniperwheel and Rob have definitely changed a lot and not changed much in their TOME incarnations, if that makes sense. Especially Rob, makes me wonder of the character changes for the other minor characters that appeared in TTA. Also makes me wonder if there are any changes for the Netkings or even the Ranks of Sanctuary if they show up.
Looking forward to seeing the changes mostly from here on out.
significantly better than episode 1
animation looked a bit better done for the most part
you're taking the time to develop the characters now, I see you listened to the reviewers
battle sequences were better thought out and felt more like watching a game
I like the redesigned versions of Splat and Rob
HOWEVER:
You never explained how Gamecrazed knew to go there in the first place
When Doubling is giving his report, he references a videogame, in the short about him and Rockoon, he specifically states that he dislikes videogames
still needs work, but it's better. keep improving!
Seriously my favorite series on the internet period
Prepare for the Ultimate and Honest Review
Art: The Art is pretty decent. It fits the theme of the show. You really don't need great detail, because it is a comedic show. I like the Artwork. Though if you decide to increase the detail on the artwork. It still would be good.
Animation: The animation was also decent. It seems a bit rushed. I notice that some of the lip-sync look like Japanimation Mouth Flaps. I would like to see more exaggeration, anticipation, squash, and stretch. Also more arcs.
Story: The Story is very engaging. This show has awesome potential. Keep working hard at it, and it is going to go places. Just don't rush it. Take pride in your work, and bring great quality to the table. Not quantity. You used a lot of Tweening. Recycled animation is okay because... that is how a video-game is anyway. :P
Dialog: Some of the Dialog was repetitive, and adds no substance to the story. You can tell the story without the use of so much dialog. The dialog didn't really make me laugh, but I did let out a smile. Even still a lot of people wouldn't understand the jokes unless they played an MMO before. Which is no problem, because I figured that is the audience you are trying to reach for.
Audio: The Audio is Superb. Great music that fits the genre of the show. The voice actors and how you tweak them is also superb. I like the "L" approach you did with the "Anonymous Employer" at the beginning. That was pretty rich. I like that Dragon Knight guy. He is very annoying, but in a loving way. Every time you see him, you are like, "Oh God, this dork." This is great, we need over the top character like him. I want to see Kirbs personality a lot more. I want to see more of his quarks. What sort of habit that he has, or certain thing does he do to set himself apart from other characters? For example, is he the type that wants to duel everyone... even at the most inconvenient time? Stuff like this would set him apart from the other characters. To me he is almost like Flamegirl, though not as feminine...
Keep at it. This is a great show. Don't rush it. take pride on what you are doing, because your potential is outstanding. Though I am still angry at you because you beat me to the punch on creating a cartoon based on an MMO!