Nice!
Very well done indeed.
I hope he join an epic battle for revenge or something.
Reviews for "Luminiscense"
Yehaa finally something more serious
The backgrounds and atmosphere were brilliantly done. And it seems to be an interesting start for good story in the future. I was so impressed by the overal quality that the the sometime low framerate ( use of a low number of indipendent frames for rather complex animations ) used in the animation of the characters didnt bother me at all.
The only thing that doesnt make this a 10/10 movie is weird storyplacement. When the 1940 sign showed up, I expected the planes to fly over them and destroy an yet unseen town or something of the sort. In woII there had been several cases in which bombers had to drop their payload in order to maintain altitude or preserve fuel in order to make it. But these were rare and last measure events and only done by actual bombers instead of a fighter carrying a tactical bomb. So its unclear to me why a whole squadron of fighters would bomb these 2 people in a empty field other than simple product placement.
Which is a shame.
another great animation
I've been following you since i joined NG last year. You have so much talent in terms of animation and I can tell that you are only getting better with each new project. However, while the animation here is truly top notch and there is definite improvement from your previous serious, the storytelling in this film is sub-par. The dialogue is unnatural and forced. Chase and April's discussion of predeterminism vs. self-determinism is wholly out of place. When people talk about the future, they talk about what they plan to do later in life, not how it may or mayn't be determined by fate. The whole conversation is a hamfisted and clumsy way of introducing a major theme. If you want the idea of fate vs. selfdeterminism to come into the film, it has to be done with some finesse and subtlety. Here, it feels like the audience is being slapped in the face with it. There are a variety of techniques one can use. You could introduce it in an opening monologue, that's probably the easiest way. Chase could say something like, "I always felt like people just choose their own paths and that everything is random, but when I met April, I started to feel differently. I wanted to believe in fate and that she and I were meant to be together." While this is the easiest method, it is still pretty forceful and can still be somewhat clumsy if not handled properly. A more subtle approach is to have some external stimulus prompt the characters to voice their sentiments. April's gut reaction to the war could be that France is being punished by God, while Chase disagrees. This way we learn about the characters and their respective ideologies without it feeling forced and unnatural, and the theme is introduced as a subtext for their conversation. Of course there are a multitude of methods other than the two I've highlighted, but hopefully this helps in your writing process.
caught inbetween
im not a fan of romance but this brings a tear to my eye. but then again i laughed about the fact that explosions came. but it was WW1 so i was super guilty and sad.
I love it!
But there is one thing that ruins it for me
And this in the end; 'to be continued'
Why not end it there?
It was a good sad ending showing how harsh those days were