just perfect ^^
I always appreciate new artists that get some support from well known folks.
maybe your microphone needs a reconditioning, but there were some laughters in it, like the "upcoming flashback warning"
overall for some improvement i'd reccomend to check the timing again, but i think it wasn't bad.
Nice job... ehrm... i'd write your name but i already forgot it again.
But i hope seeing more from you soon ;)
and next time without ed, ego and moto. I don't think you really need them to become better.