Reviews for Chibi Theatre 1

[Step]

Quite good for your first flash.

Pretty good job on it overall. Needs some work in some aspects, though.

The graphics were OK, especially that of the Fire Chibi, but the background was just the Windows default background with different colour, and the Chibi's in general need some working on, especially making sure the arms are attatched to the body. The Tangled Chibi could look a little better if you made the things around him look better than just lines. I really liked the artwork of the explosion, though. I liked how you made the Chibi's have different face expressions. The animation was smooth and quite good, especally the bomb exploding, the Fire Chibi's head, and the explosion fading away. Still, the speech bubbles disappeared much too quickly and it was hard to read through them so quicky. You should make it that a speech bubble disappears when you press the space bar or something.

The story was a little hard to catch on, and I didn't really know what the race really is until I read the Author's Comments after. Also, what was the place they were in, and why were they happy to be there first? I think you should give this flash a bit more of an introduction. The humour was OK, but nothing too special. I chuckled a bit when it said 'Must resist urge to kill', but that was really it. The concept of planting a bomb in a seemingly ordinary item, giving it to someone, and then they throw it back is a little unoriginal. Still, the concept of the Chibi's in general, after reading the Author's Comments, sounds good.

The audio, in my opinion, could be a little louder, but I'm surprised by the file size that this flash has after having two different songs in it, so good job over there. The song choice was fine, but the first song changing to the second didn't have such a smooth transition.

In general, it's great for your first flash, but needs some work to it. A good start, though. Keep it up.
5/10
3/5

-Review Request Club-

PikaRobo responds:

1. It's the Windows backround because I was too lazy to make my own, fixed in future episodes.
2. The detached arms are intentional
3. Actually the explosion was a sprite I found online. I can't remember where I found it because it's been almost a year ago. However I fixed some parts of it so it fits in with the flash.
4. Yeah, the text speed seems to be a bit of a problem for many.
5. Do I have to explain everything!!! >:(
6. Sorry for the stale plot, couldn't really think of anything for a great first episode.
7. Thanks for commenting.

[Coop]

Hmm...

It's not bad, but it could do with a few more bits and pieces, just to develop the animation a bit further.

Perhaps the use of shapes is a good base to start with for the drawing of the chibi, but I'm not sure if you should leave them like that - get the drawing tools and fill in the gaps between the ellipses, as it will make the imagery look so much more advanced.

Perhaps taking a little more time with the football would be the next thing, as the laces shouldn't be that long and the ball should end in points, with hoops around either end. These small details will make the world of difference.

Then the plot - perhaps the fire chibi could have run away, or the greenish one could have tried in vain to dive for cover. I'm sure that as this was just a pilot, you'll be giving a more in depth plot to future episodes.

[Review Request Club]

PikaRobo responds:

I'll try to improve. As for the plot the fire guy DID run away at the very end of the video, he just dissapeared for a split second and that was by complete accident. I said in my description I couldn't fix it. The football part was probably just a plothole, but thanks to you bringing that up I will no doubt explain that in future episodes (As to why he didn't just throw the thing away or why the fire one didn't die as well.) I could probably explain that right now, but I don't want to ruin it on just a feedback response. ;)

[MrDeadly]

Pretty Good for It's Kind

I liked how even though you used simple drawings in the flash you still included movement suggestions, change in music at points, and action sounds. Keep up the good work.

PikaRobo responds:

Cool, thanks! They are supposed to look like that.

[LAchlanator]

Has potential

just keep practising the animation skills and don't rely on tweening so much, its good to have a little free drawing in flash, some say it looks sloppy but once you get good at it you can make animations look stylish. I now it takes a long time but the top animations weren't made in 10 minutes. Story is the only reason you got above one but even that needs to be revised.

PikaRobo responds:

Actually most of the movement don't have tweening, they were all done frame by frame with a few exceptions. There are just some movements you just can't capture through tweening. And just so you know, it took me about a month to completely finish this, I was just learning with animation. And even stil my desire for a Feb release was ruined by 8 minutes.

[Insanimation]

Didn't really work..

Art/Animation: 3/10
There wasn't anything here that was any good. The characters were pretty simple and boring. The fire effect wasn't bad, but it didn't loop properly. Sometimes, the subtitles went by too quickly to read fully.

Plot/Concept: 3/10
I didn't find it funny, to be honest..The build up was too slow and boring, and the punchline just wasn't funny enough to even it out.

Sound/Music: 4/10
The music was alright, but didn't add much to the flash..When the third guy came in, the music stopped for a bit too long before the second track came on.
Some voice actors would have been nice too.

Overall: 3/10
It wasn't funny, nor well animated. Nothing appealed to me..

[Review Request Club]

PikaRobo responds:

Well even though I do understand what you mean and I will try to listen to most of your advice keep in mind this IS the first Flash I ever made, so it is no surprise why it is so low in quality. Hopefully the next one improved a little, as it is a LITTLE bit closer to what I want it to be. And maybe future episodes will meet standards.