Better but still not the best
Probably wasting my time reviewing thi sas it is part of a series and you yourself mentioned in the author's comments that it isn't of best quality but what I will say is that you need to learn how to be lazy, not in a way that you slack of on the important parts just learn what needs detail and what doesn't and put more effort into important things (like movement). So far with the series Im curious as to how things move forward but not really impressed with anything so far. Keep it up though because this is a dramatic improvement from the last episode.