Not bad, does need work though.
Me personally it was interesting work but ure 3d does need work. I take it u have been using 3d Studio Max and cell shading all the textures, if im wrong i appologise but thats what i think you have done, that part works fine but its the way the actuall edit feels. if u can render your sequences out in long sections then edit them externally because if u make the peice without an editor afterwards the pacing feels too slow.
Other than that man good effort but please use a better microphone the distortion was killing my ears man, u need to muffle or delect your inflections in your speach from the mic.
There are a couple of things u can do, a ladies tight and coat hanger are the most effective if u dont have any money. Anyway i hope in some small way this helps but as i have said good effort but check ure edit and sound they need work!
All the best, Aspoon