Nice first attempt!

For a first attempt, this appears to be fairly solid. There's no stick figures (Hurrah! :D) and it's colorful. The animation is a bit primitive, but you'll work through that with some sweat and experience.

On a good note, everything was very colorful, and the drawing were decent. What I really thought was cool, however, his the way the flash flowed with the music; when the protaganist (?) shed a tear the music began to pick up as if he were battling with inner turmoil. Probably unintentional, but very cool!

There are things to improve as well. The animation is quite rough. As has been previously said, I believe more keyframes and pumping up the fps should help. I understand that this was just a quick attempt, but why not submit something until it is the best it could be? If you do that, you'll find yourself greeted with some surprising results! (In a good way) The music also was too long for the flash. I don't know if there is a way you could make it fade out with flash, but that would be helpful.

Not a bad job at all for a beginner. Spend more time paying attention to details, read some tutorials, and keep working at it despite what anyone may say. :)

~Blaze

PS. Thanks for using my song! ^_^

I hope it is the first of a serie

very well made and opens a plot to a great series
just go on and do it

Pretty good for a "First Flash"...

Even though it was your first flash it was pretty good... You just need to work on having more key frames (if done properly will make the action smoother)... Otherwise I see good potential : ) ...

nice

for a first animation this is pretty good. it had pretty good drawn people and, overall was prob. the second best 1st flash ive seen.

Needs more

The animation was at time choppy and though the music was good, the movie itself did not flow well enough to accommodate it. Work on your art work and story, otherwise it just a flash without direction.