You've got a great start going
I would suggest that in order to get better ratings on this site (and quite possibly frontpage or a daily award) That you add more sound! Add some voices! Add more Sound effects or music! I know you probably don't have a microphone, but you can go to the flash forums and ask somebody to do the voice acting for you, I am sure that with your potential somebody will assist you gladly.
Also learn to make the timing a little bit smoother, as in more fast-paced, it was great but it moved a fair bit slowly! I am sure that if you work on these things you will have a great series! You have an interesting style, and a good start here, so I hope you found my review helpful and insightful!