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Hey everyone, this is my 200th audio submission to Newgrounds.


When I first started producing nine years ago, I never imagined that I'd do anything like this. I mean, I did believe it possible, but right now, I can't even contain my excitement over how I've actually pulled it off. ...What an emotional roller-coaster this one has been.


This is a song ostensibly about a girl receiving a star from her Maker... right?


All vocals sung by your truly, as usual.

The piece was done in 8 days, beginning on Tuesday the 11th at 06:30 BST. I put myself through NGADM / NGUAC conditions, stipulating a deadline of two weeks from the start date.


Full post about the song and its process and its context here.

https://troisnyx.newgrounds.com/news/post/1112122


CW: child abuse.

With special thanks to Led By Donkeys, who inspired this work in part.


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LYRICS


I


Did you know that the queen of our universe

has a crown of twelve stars upon her head,

and that her ways are gentleness and love,

the kind that only a mother

could give her child?


Seeing her golden crown, We have made these stars;

We have made them hover in the deep blue sky.

There are twelve in number, all in all,

and we're giving each star away

to a very special child.


You will share this star with your friends all around you;

you will show them light, help them all to dream;

you will keep its light deep within your heart.

Now I give this to you, dearest daughter of Mine!


Please take care of this star;

it shines so bright,

it's just the way you are!

Let it hover above you

as you bask in its light;

let it lead you,

let it guide you, oh—!


Please take care of this star;

it shines so bright,

it's just the way you are!

Let it banish the darkness

and keep you safe at night,

let it bring forth your happiest dreams!


II


Still I hear your words in the midst of the strife

hidden just behind the front door of my home.

I have kept it close to my heart

for very many years, but now

it must return to you:


I've been beaten up badly for keeping this star;

(I can hear the thundering of your battered skin!)

I've been pleading with those who want to tear it all apart;

(I can see the tears of blood it shed at night!)

No one sees the tears rushing down my cheeks at night-time,

(And I can see the words that form within your heart)

when I go to sleep alone!

(that silently rise to Me!)


I have shared this star with my friends all around me;

I have shown them hope, I have cherished the light,

but now I risk my all to see it shining right beside me,

so I send this to you, dearest Father, oh please—!


Please take care of this star;

it shines so bright,

it's just the way you are!

Take it gently in your hands

as it flies across the waters

to be with you,

to embrace you, oh—!


Please take care of this star;

it shines so bright,

it's just the way you are!

One day I'll fight my way

to get it back within my hands—!


And it'll shine

into the night

as it brings forth my happiest dreams!

(Commend to My hands your happiest dreams!)


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:) This is on par or even better than a lot of Disney fantasy film score. It's so beautiful and the lyrics are very meaningful. Congrats on the 200 mark.

200 tracks. Talk about a milestone. Congrats!

We already begin in a good note: not only you based this track on an image in the art portal, you also made it yourself and it's really good. Props for that; now, back to the music.
The beginning atmosphere is spot on and flows very nicely, then the piano starts. You did a good job with the vocals processing this time around, and took a major improvement step from Child of the Woods; frankly, this track is on a whole new level.
At 1:35 the build-up: excellently done, i was looking forward to the chord progression while listening, and i was not disappointed in the slightest =)
The main section around 2:00 is good too, stands out well in its own while being solid as well.
Now, 3:21. THAT. PART. This is where the piece shines bright: you did an extraordinary modulation here and surprised me, to say the least. You took a huge risk, because doing good modulations is really difficult, but you did it in a way that turned this piece around, and raising the standards in a way which can't be overlooked. The reprise of the build-up and main section at 4:08 is not abrupt, and that's another good note.
The vocal department now variates a bit, being more original and switching from chorus to solo voice multiple times, giving a better sense of harmony; clever choice. One thing i forgot to mention: really enjoyed the strings department, they are processed like in professional/commercial soundtracks. In fact, this song genre could have been also Cinematic rather than Miscellaneous.
The finale is great, and it ends the song with a more than good impression.

Summing up: the mix is well processed, the concept is solid and original, you made lots of clever composition choices and took a lot of risks, which led you to produce this cinematic harmony.
Probably one of the best pieces with vocals i've heard on this site since i joined in 2015. It's a 10/10, period.
After this, no one has the right to doubt your music skills ever again! Maybe somewhere in the future we could also produce a collaboration, but first i want to get better myself, we'll see.

Until then, keep making music, head high! 🎵

Pretty nice

First of all, congrats on the huge milestone! 200 published pieces, wow...

I love the intro leading up the piano's entrance - it has such a nice, calming atmosphere to it. I can hear the stereo field slowly widening as the distant vocals play, bells chime, and finally the pad fades in. It's like a dark room being slowly lit up by a warm light. It sets the space of the piece up very well before the verse begins. The layering of synths and orchestral instruments as the verse builds up to the chorus is great. You always blend their properties together very well! There's also some great sense of text painting with the transitions between minor and major in the second verse

The chorus itself is just wonderful, very emotional and powerful in both lyrical and musical content. The double reeds particularly add so much to the feeling of it all - I definitely felt something when they came in. Having just read your news post on this piece, I can hear how much your production has improved over time. To be clear, I have never doubted your ability to compose something at this level. You've got a great creative energy in your music and it's been present even as far back as your 2014 "Oceans Wide". It feels more like over time your progress on writing and (moreso) production has allowed you to share a closer connection between the listeners and your emotional state in creating the music. I barely even remember a time where you didn't use your voice in your music anymore. I'm glad you keep pushing yourself with singing, because you create some gorgeous textures with all of your layered vocals. On a slightly critical note, I will say that the backing vocals @ 3:50 sound a bit distorted (not sure if that was just a way to push them through the busier mix) and there is also a similar buzzing @ 4:34 on the transition, which I thought was coming from the vocals. Your voice dips a bit flat at the climax @ 5:21, but the lead vocals are overall very nice. I get hit with an odd wave of nostalgia every time that first verse comes in!

Fantastic work! I'm ready for another hundred! :)

Troisnyx responds:

Thank you so much for the kind words ;_; That is incredibly high praise.

Re: the distorted backing vocals at 3:50, I have occasionally taken to doing this since my AIM submission of last year, sursum_corda.EXFLOW_cls.PANDAEMONIUM::STORMFALL/., where distorted vocals were a common feature of Hymmnos songs from which I drew influence -- and I began applying this to some of my other songs, notably child of the woods and hallowed silence. It feels like a decent way to push them through a mix, but I grew to love that manner of doing things.

200 songs. That is quite the achievement. Im really glad that i was able to witness it, thank you for making this possible, and most of all congratulations.

As for the song, its beautiful. And also,i feel this song pretty close to my heart,because its about a topic that i went through, and thats what my music is based about. Getting outcasted and sometimes even beat up for the passion you follow, but not letting that negativity affect your dreams.

Once again, congrats, and thank you!

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Troisnyx
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Uploaded
Aug 19, 2020
9:19 AM EDT
Genre
Cinematic
File Info
Song
8.3 MB
6 min 28 sec
Software
  • Audacity
  • Sytrus
  • LABS
  • VSCO 2
  • FL Studio 11
Hardware
  • Scarlett 2i2
Misc. Kit
  • Fruity Soundfont Player
  • Samson R21S
  • BBC Symphony Orchestra

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