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Vivisection

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Track 17 from my upcoming Avatar Caine LP.


Thoughts?


Lyrics: (not yet recorded...)
I came into this world precisely three months before my projected birth
Family life takes a lot of my will, but not much of my girth;
My mom’s got a man who doesn't want to understand her skill;
Earth's at a standstill, everyone sits and shits while man shoots and kills;
Some take pills, others poke themselves with quills;
My writings take understanding will and power;
After a clean shower I flower while I glower at your steep inclinations;
Don't want an invitation to your divine inspiration;
No divinity I see, just my two eyes with which I seek;
I concede that planting seeds help me breathe while bass shakes the ground;
I've shaped these found sounds like a snake biting clowns;
Please refrain from prying open my brain and stealing my style;
It's taken me an extremely long while to perfect this smile;


All these other MC's wish they could defeat me;
I put their heads in a vice, tighten it, and then squeeze;
They heighten their vocabulary by listening to me;
Don't whip on this gifted beef of a beat or I'll have to call the police;
You freaks better believe I have ‘em all between my knees;
I keep my penis inside my jeans tucked beneath my nuts;
Ya'll can't stomach this bliss, believe it or not I eat my own snot;
At least keep all this muck just between us, OK please?;
Tell anyone, and you'll be arrested for indecency;
I switched teams cause I'm crafty, just kidding, I'm simply nasty;
Try and hand your mastery over by granting your slant rhyme support;
I have a seven leaf clover and I’m crafting a report
for your crimes against attacking my fort;


Hook:
Cuttin through your flesh
Hungry for the best
I curse the souls of many men


SAMPLES:
Stan Getz & Joao Gilberto (piano. sax)
Bill Evans (bass)
Choclair (hook line)
The Whooliganz (hook line)
The 1975 (hook lyric)
Von Poe VII (hook line)


Image: A physiological demonstration with the vivisection of a dog, 1832, an oil painting by Emile-Edouard Mouchy, 1832.
https://wellcomelibrary.org/item/b12023917#?c=0&m=0&s=0&cv=0

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Looking forward to this LP, Shimmzy.

Beat production is dope, no surprise there. Lyrics; on point, loving the introspective narrative, with some f-u attitude. Rhymes is good. I would recommend looking at a couple bars here and there to help build more schemes and patterns into the verse.At points it reads as if there are forced consecutive rhymes in some lines. For example:

My mom’s got a man who doesn't want to understand her skill;
Earth's at a standstill, everyone sits and shits while man shoots and kills;
Some take pills, others poke themselves with quills;
My writings take understanding will and power;
After a clean shower I flower while I glower at your steep inclinations;
Don't want an invitation to your divine inspiration;

- edit-

Mom's got a man, (shit!) doesn't understand her skill
She's at a stand-still. So we sit while the man shoots to kill
Take some pills, or poke yourself with the quill
I write to understand this, it takes power and will
As I shower my flower, I see your steep inclinations
I'm not wow'd by the tower, you can keep the invitation
-

Anyway, thats my 2 cents and a loonie. Solid concept, can't wait to hear when Avatar Caine is ready to drop!

Libby-Shimmz responds:

Thanks for the pointers Mick!

I'll see how your edit flows out loud and contemplate whether to change it or not. Likely will, but it remains to be seen.

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Dec 6, 2019
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File Info
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5.6 MB
2 min 28 sec
Software
  • FL Studio
  • Sonitex STX-1260
  • Geektronic
  • Wave Traveller

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