Reviews for The Sugar Claws: F.C.

[Synxz]

Not as good as Cooljaws

Comparatively, you outdone yourself with Cooljaws. But this one has no more than a quarter of cooljaws greatness. It's definitely unique, music is proper and the drawings are top notch.
Main problem is the story. You opt to tell instead of show. You told in several lines who, what, from where of the sugarclaws, instead of showing us what you're trying to tell. Then the monster dies but I can't feel any empathy when there's very little-meaningful interaction between the heroin and sugarclaws. You didn't expand your characters either? What about the history between the black kid and the heroin? How was the father before the wife dead and him being so screwed up? How did the heroin chanced upon the sugarclaws? Why did she bother to feed the sugarclaws?
I'm still confused as to why the girl throws up her food (ritual?). And the meaning behind the title, sugar claws...Is feels like- just a tittle, as opposed to your collin -> cooljaws.

Celx-Requin responds:

The characters aren't as important to the premise of the story as they were in "Cooljaw: Dreaming Darkly", because the story isn't about the nature of violence, rather societal and individual neglect and aversion towards it.

Cooljaw's characters were fleshed out because their backgrounds were integral to establishing the reasons why violence may occur, that wasn't something I wanted to deal with again this time around. The issue I wanted to deal with this time is why is it so difficult to prevent violence.

I agree it would have been nice to have been able to flesh the characters out a bit more, but I think I got my message across.

Sorry for the terse response, it's late and I'm trying to respond to everyone...
- Celx

[SolemnSumo]

Less is More

The music and art style were interesting choices and took a lot of time by the looks of it. This is all thrown away when you go from a lengthy intro keeping us in suspense, to rushing straight to the revelation of everything with minor transitions. Just by using large words, you aren't making the description of the scenes better. The point is not to alienate your readers. While it's not hard to get your meaning, it breaks the flow when reading and sounds like your trying too much. Describing the rape events and the discarded twin would have been better served by a less agressive method where we put it together ourselves instead of it being shown straight up.

Celx-Requin responds:

I don't think using large words is "alienating my readers", because my readers will dig learning new words (or better yet already know them). I make my comics on my dime, I'm not here to pander to the lowest common denominator...

It's also sad to think society has gotten to a point where one could view my literature as something with "large words". I feel there's a slow pogrom being committed on literature, for example here in Canada journalists working for the "globe and mail" are instructed to write at a sixth grade level (as documented in the film "stupidity"), that's depressing when the globe is supposed to be Canada's leading paper.

The rant above aside, I wish to address your "less is more" argument. The revelation was sudden, that was the point, most people don't see these kind of scenario's occurring until something horrible happens. That's not to say that these things happen of of a sudden, there are always clues leading up to something that's about to manifest. As much as the story is about the dangers of not dealing with one's problems, it's also about how society has grown progressively apathetic towards each other.

To further elaborate on this I would like to share a story from when I was in elementary, I remember a cop coming to my school talking to our class about what to do if one was being kidnapped. He told us to scream "fire", the reasoning being you won't grab a strangers attention unless they themselves are in danger.

Lastly this is your one and only review on this website, there must have been something about the story that resonated with you, or you wouldn't have bothered to finish reading, and going through the hassle or reviewing the piece.

Don't get me wrong I appreciate the review,
I just felt the need to address your critique.
- Celx

[thetoughcritic]

Not that good

Just my opinion but this was a weak submission and didn't have any good qualities. javascript:submission_controller.GetR eviewController().SaveReview();

Celx-Requin responds:

I feel the same way regarding your review...
- Celx

[M-Trogdor-98]

Gotta be more blunt!!!

I couldn't find the play button!!

Celx-Requin responds:

Seriously...
Like there are instructions and stuff...

Sincerely,
- Celx