Never disappoints
Really love this series. I've never been disappointed in your work.
Your style varies a bit from episode to episode, but one thing that is common between all of them is the quality of the work. Clean lines and an amazing style, really incorporating the use of colors with the story and general feel of the flash/comic.
Thanks man I really appreciate it!
I'm not really sure what my next project is gonna be, whatever it is I hope you'll tune in :)
Thanks,
- Celx
This my 1st one from you...
Nice storyline ... I was into it the whole time .... only thing I can say is that with the song that was looping ... trying to make it blend just a little more ... other than that AWESOME job.
That's hard to do cause I didn't create the audio file I just used it...
Thanks for the review though I'm glad you enjoyed it!
Sincerely,
- Celx
Deepy interesting
Well I found this quite interesting and nice to see there was a large amount of changes and other good things put into this one. Strange how the other ones in the series were mediocre in file size and this one has them all fit in along with a lot of cool bonus content detailing of what the series was all about. This was indeed an interesting way to finish it all up too.
The animation here was cool and I really liked the intro and outro. I think the only thing that could possibly make them better is having her mumble stuff I think. The "crap" intro where you speak looked well animated too and I liked it. However I can see why it got banned from that other site sadly, mostly due to the fork being lodged into her throat and the scene where her father forces her into having sex with him to satisfy his selfish needs.
I think the last three parts including the dark and grim father part were interesting. Nice to finally figure out that "Sugar Claw" was her sister along which feels like a giant plot twist and turning point as well to me. Sad how it spared her father despite everything he did to both of them as well. At least it gave her time to go to the local orphanage and possibly move away too.
The animation here was very nice and the simplicity in color was indeed create as the password needing bonus content says. Also without that part I would have never noticed the letters spelled out on the tree limbs sadly. Pink, blue, black, and white all seem to go nicely together here which is rather wonderful too.
The choice in music is fitting as usual too. The usual song you tend to loop I've noticed since the start of the series could possibly be better if edited it a bit and trimmed off possibly the last half second to make the loop perfect and so the tune never really has to stop. I think to make things interesting, for the last chapter you could have actually cut off the music so it goes with what that chapter is saying.
Much thanks for also changing up the font style so it is much easier for people to read for the most part. I noticed in the speech bubbles you still kept it a bit fancy looking which was really nice too I think. It gives a good feel to it. However I would agree with most people early in stating the text was hard to read for the most part (mostly because I never got truly fancy in writing cursive sadly) and nice to see it got changed so people could read it easier.
Overall, everything including the bonus content was great. Very mature content not for the really young or weak hearted I suppose. Very well done animated and story telling, great job.
Review Request Club
I would have edited the "Waiting for tomorrow" track if I had sound software to do so, flash doesn't really allow you to make many edits to sound files you import. I also tried to get in touch with the artist who created the track to no avail.
Deviantart doesn't have any problems with displaying copious amounts of sadistic violence, but they draw the line at anything sexual regardless of the context in which it's presented. Indeed it was chapter six that made them uneasy...
People are complicated, I don't really want to present things as "black and white", because things are never "black and white". I mean when you look at an atrocious act like the school shooting at columbine, people tend to demonize the shooter. That's understandable, and it's one's right to do so, on the other hand we tend to forgot that the perpetrators of these crimes are still people; their families grieved for the shooters, because they weren't killers to them, they were their kids. Bill did very cruel, and disgusting things, but he's still a person, that doesn't change what he did; and it shouldn't serve as an excuse for his actions, but It's important to acknowledge a person as something other than a monster. In some situations no one wins, in some situations the only thing one can do is try to pick up the pieces and move forward.
Thanks for the very thoughtful review!
- Celx
It had potential in the beginining..
But it lost my interest. with this rape, and "Sugar claws was my dead sister who let dad kill her twice." I would have prefered my sacrifices. Maybe even lead her dad to the sugar claws, but not actually show the monster. Its more suspensful. Or if she were to take that black kid to the sugar claws for some reason, and continue her life by giving sacrifices and being raped. Who knows.
Hello,
I would like to address the reasons why I felt I needed to show the "monster", it was important to show "the sugar claws" for two reasons. The first being to show the neglect Bill had for his own daughter.
The second being "the sugar claws" is supposed to serve as an allegory, Maple was vomiting in order to hide the fact she was feeding "the sugar claws", in doing this she was feeding into a problem. As the story progressed Maple became weaker and weaker, while "the sugar claws" grew stronger, Maple was feeding into a problem, instead of dealing with it, and at the end it led to disaster.
The ending isn't supposed to feel good, too many stories end with happy endings, I think if I were to end it with something upbeat it would undermine the cautionary message at the heart of the story.
Paradoxically if I were to end it horribly it could come off as nihilistic, which is a message I don't want to convey with any of my stories.
A story dealing with this kind of subject matter is a hard sell,
but I thank you for reading it and sharing your thoughts.
Sincerely,
- Celx
And once again, you've caused me to have sympathy for something I never expected to have sympathy for. I enjoy that, actually. Your stories turning around our concept of what is usually 'good' and showing that the true monsters tend to wear 'normal' human faces, where as the steriotypical 'bad guys' turn out to be..well, not 'good guys' but not nearly as bad as we expected.
Such powerful immagery, dealing with problems that happen in everyday life.
I have one issue though, at the end when they're talking about how all things have to end...I dunno, it seems a wee bit drawn out. I mean, I like it, but it seems rather textful, however I really don't know how you could've made it better. It's just my instincts sayin' it's a little wordy and drawn out when the rest of the comic is full of imagery to go with the words. Doesn't 'flow' right.
Other then that it's gold.
Hello,
The ending on this one was a tough call to make...
I knew how I wanted to end it narratively speaking, but I wasn't sure how to go about it in terms of the execution, in retrospect it was a bit wordy; but overall I'm happy with the end result.
Thanks for the review!
- Celx