It's ok
It was hard to follow because there was no reference or focal point to follow the characters. So it was hard to tell how fast the characters were really moving or how far they have travelled from start to finish. You tried to show this with the background moving and sliding by the characters, but there is no frontal focal point to help the audience follow the action.
I don't know if the characters ended up in the same spot or ended up 200 yard from where they started.