Reviews for The Last Hour: Chapter 1

[Fro]

Meh.

I accidentally reviewed the other two chapters before I reviewed this one. My bad.

Animation/Graphics - Believe it or not the animation in my opinion was twice as good as part two and three. The other ones looked a lot like spam, but this one actually looked like there was some sort of effort put into them. The drawing and animation of the ship wasn't great, but it wasn't too bad either.

Story - Again, just like the other flashes of yours you make this nice descriptive story and in your flash it's nothing great at all. I mean it's only a ship flying from one side of the screen to the other. And then some sort of fade effect that almost made look like the ship was evaporating or something.

Audio - THANK YOU FOR THE LOVE OF GOD. I'm so happy that I didn't have to listen to those annoying voices again. I think there should be voices on the menu like that, but the ones that you include in your other flashes are so annoying that I preferred it without them. Music was fine like usual.

Overall, this one makes me think that the series isn't spam, but the other ones make me think that it is. I don't really know what to think.

C52

~ Review Request Club ~

Jaiba responds:

i'd like you to check out my newest movie, chapter 5. i think you'll really enjoy it. you'll see the great process from chapter 1 to 5. and you'll see this series definitely isn't spam. i hope you enjoy it, and thank you kind sir for reviewing.

[thousandgunner]

eh..

too short and did not tell anything about the story. and a few notes
1. why wasn't the ship invisible from the start
2. should give a better name for the aliens and their planet
3. why would the Anti-Christ team up with aliens? In Revelations, he doesn't need the help and I doubt that on Earth he would allow any kind of opposition against him let alone an entire fleet, besides, if they're going for a full assault, then why do they need a recon?
4. there is no need for the mature rating if there is no violence or explicit text

bring answers to these questions and maybe the 20 second short will be much better

Jaiba responds:

excellent suggestions. This is based on biblical scripture, not exactly accurate. Actually the movie is quite dark actually. I mean a ship flying through asteroids is quite violent in my opinion, plus think of how dark the feel is. The explicit text occured because of the scariness of the anti-christ.

[OxSox]

It's a start...

Forgive me if I focus on the negative in my reviews, there are good parts which by in large I'm not talking about. However I've never found reviews which overly focus on what is good to be very helpful. What I'm trying to say is don't be offended or discouraged by this or my following reviews, I'm honestly trying to help you to improve:
Animation: Everything you've done in this movie is no more than a basic tween, there is way more to animation than just linearly moving an object from one point to another (or applying a transparency linearly). For starters, when the craft moves to avoid the asteroids it would be nice if you rotated it when moves up or down. The flame on the back of the ship, albiet your best animation in this movie needs alot of work. What if instead of a circle you made it a flame? Just some startering ideas...

Artwork: Your artwork is up to Newgrounds standards, I don't think this area needs anything more than the natural improvement that will happen as you draw more. Already your latest movie shows this upward movement in artwork.

Story: The actual plot your setting up sounds good to me, but I dislike how much you explain in text, and how little you actually show in your animations. I realize how much of the ideas in the text are hard to animate "big picture" ideas. But this is an animation web site, not a story website with animation to back up.

Overall: Wayyy to short, in my opinion if you combined all three of your movies you might have an okay sized story, but this movie lacks the sustenance to stand alone. However, you have set up a story with the promise of being somewhat interesting, and that's something!

Jaiba responds:

i appreciate your very good review. you even give me ideas of what to do to improve and i appreciate that very much. thank you thank you for your reviews.
-jaiba

[X3cutioner]

too short..

i saw chapter 2 & 3 before this one because you requested it for review.
so knowing what my reviews for the 2nd and 3rd are you realize how bad this is in comparison.
i mean yes the intro tells the story better then the animation does but i'm hoping when i view the 5th part that you've actually made something decent.
there's no point on telling the story in the intro, that should just be a small taster.
the animation should tell the story..
also make them longer, you're not going to please anyone with a short animation that's supposed to tell a story.

*Review Request Club*

Jaiba responds:

chapter 5 shall redeem all of these movies, you will be shocked.

[Bezman]

Short and unfulfilling.

Wow - that was short!

For 'jaiba productions', you could use a more interesting typeface than Times. Something more decorative.

And on the main menu, fading out the bottom of the 'play' buttons seems like a bad idea - buttons should generally be one of the most noticable things on a screen imo.

Try being more careful when drawing the stars, so they're tiny dots rather than short lines.

The plot sounds interesting from your author's comments. I'm not familiar with the bible, but I'm guessing you are? Always kinda fun to see a skewed 'reinterpretation' of a popular story.

However, due to its short length, none of that really came to fruition. Nothing happened here and there's actually nothing within the flash itself that makes me excited about the next one. It seems awkwardly cut.

Jaiba responds:

this is one of my oldest works. i want to redeem myself. if you check out my latest chapter as of late, chapter 5. you will notice all the improvements of the bad things you spoke about. i hope you check it out and review again. for chapter 5. thanks.

jaiba