Reviews for The Last Hour: Chapter 1

[OxSox]

It's a start...

Forgive me if I focus on the negative in my reviews, there are good parts which by in large I'm not talking about. However I've never found reviews which overly focus on what is good to be very helpful. What I'm trying to say is don't be offended or discouraged by this or my following reviews, I'm honestly trying to help you to improve:
Animation: Everything you've done in this movie is no more than a basic tween, there is way more to animation than just linearly moving an object from one point to another (or applying a transparency linearly). For starters, when the craft moves to avoid the asteroids it would be nice if you rotated it when moves up or down. The flame on the back of the ship, albiet your best animation in this movie needs alot of work. What if instead of a circle you made it a flame? Just some startering ideas...

Artwork: Your artwork is up to Newgrounds standards, I don't think this area needs anything more than the natural improvement that will happen as you draw more. Already your latest movie shows this upward movement in artwork.

Story: The actual plot your setting up sounds good to me, but I dislike how much you explain in text, and how little you actually show in your animations. I realize how much of the ideas in the text are hard to animate "big picture" ideas. But this is an animation web site, not a story website with animation to back up.

Overall: Wayyy to short, in my opinion if you combined all three of your movies you might have an okay sized story, but this movie lacks the sustenance to stand alone. However, you have set up a story with the promise of being somewhat interesting, and that's something!

Jaiba responds:

i appreciate your very good review. you even give me ideas of what to do to improve and i appreciate that very much. thank you thank you for your reviews.
-jaiba

[LiquidSapphire]

Meh...

It was really too short, and you used too many granites. You should only use granites for things that are metal or shiny, etc. I think the stars in the background could have more use for granites. Overall 6.

Jaiba responds:

awesome thanks for reviewing my movies. your suggestions have been considered and we shall improve.

[neo1140]

longer

my only complaint is i think it should be longer

Jaiba responds:

thanks for the review kind sir. if you haven't already watched chapter 2, it is indeed much longer and improved. It also now features live voice acting!

So it's longer, voice acting, and better than ever. be sure to check it out and the upcoming chapters. thank you for your review.

-jaiba

[thousandgunner]

eh..

too short and did not tell anything about the story. and a few notes
1. why wasn't the ship invisible from the start
2. should give a better name for the aliens and their planet
3. why would the Anti-Christ team up with aliens? In Revelations, he doesn't need the help and I doubt that on Earth he would allow any kind of opposition against him let alone an entire fleet, besides, if they're going for a full assault, then why do they need a recon?
4. there is no need for the mature rating if there is no violence or explicit text

bring answers to these questions and maybe the 20 second short will be much better

Jaiba responds:

excellent suggestions. This is based on biblical scripture, not exactly accurate. Actually the movie is quite dark actually. I mean a ship flying through asteroids is quite violent in my opinion, plus think of how dark the feel is. The explicit text occured because of the scariness of the anti-christ.

[Purpin]

Hmmm

Fairly good animation, but not enough here to really be outstanding. I'd suggest making the next chapters longer as well.

Jaiba responds:

alright note taken. thanks for watching/reviewing.