Damn...
Well, my first complaint is the scrolling text, as I could read a single word of it (try a different font and colour, so it's more visable). Still, it seemed fairly promising, so I patiently sat throught the scrolling text only t find that there was no more!
Really, I was expecting some animation at least. The start seemed so grand at all, it was quite the anti-climax.
Judging by the small amount of Flash I witnessed, I'm sure you can do better tahn this.
my brain is sore
from reading that pint-sized, illegible novel.
that issue really needs to get addressed if you're planning a series of this.
CHANGE THE FONT
I CAN'T READ A DANGED THING!!!!!
spacedunce-5
I see no reason for this.
Sorry, but I come to newgrounds to view animations and games, not reading long scrolls of text. Maybe if this was in a book form it'd be decent, but it's just boring to sit in front of your computer and read a story that you've come up with. Also, change the font style and color as it's hard to read and when the text on the right side is overlapping the minotaur thing it's impossible to see. Maybe if this was animated or someone actually spoke what you've written it would be more well-received.
eh...
It has potential, but the music got irritatingly repetitive rather quickly and the scrolling text was both hard to read and would have kept me from seeing any background animation (which I hope to see in subsequent chapters). The graphics were good though, and like I said before, it has definite potential