Why
Why do you just eneter your story instead of an animations?
You should make your story into a flash. It's good story I'll tell you that I would like to see what else you got. Just make it in motion next time. Good choice in music it's very wierd I've never heard it before.
GODDAMN
Make the story less long, and actually READABLE...
my poor eyes... X.X
This is Flash, Not an online book
I could barely read the font of that introduction, then you don't even have animation. From the look and Style of it and from the music i was expecting something grand... EPic even..
you dissapoint man...
Um......
I hope your planning to add chapters on to this...... the drawings looked pretty awesome and I hope you make an animation. The text was a liitle hard to read with the centaur thing in the background. Oh....... and why did it take you THREE MONTHS to make this?!?!? There's no animation, just text...... well w/e....
~AceSpyderz
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The beggining take's too long, God damn dude it's like an hour.