Cliche.
Could that have used any more cliches? Even the name makes me think less of you as a human being. "S.I.N: SEED HUNTER" oh my god. and "a man who is not bound to the chanins of fate and makes his own destiny" wtf? whats a chanin? please use more english when creating sentences. And why do all your people look deformed? you could have drawn them in paint, and made them look better. Please, no more.
It sucks
This is a really bad flash. The story is completely unoriginial and you probably took the idea from many games and anime series. First of all, your anime sucks. You can't draw for shit. Second, your flash making sucks too. I've seen much better people who started making flash for their first time.
Seriously, get some new ideas. Make up your own. Don't copy Metal Gear Solid or any other anime series. Before making the flash, write ideas down for a story. Then make sure they do not look as if they were copied from games. Next mix the ideas and write the story down as if it was a short story and see how it looks.
People who make up stories don't just get an idea and make a book out of that idea. They get a series of ideas and they write them down. Then they keep writing it as a short story to see if it looks good. They often are not satisfied with the result, so they try new ideas again.
Please, do us all a favour and try out something new.
man. I love your story.
man, I just can't wait in tell what happen next. but I know ur an artist, but can u make the graphics even better. ur stoy is great man. I am telling u this. that it. good work man.