Reviews for _-={Apocalypse}=-_

[Lamazar1]

hey im finally back after about a week or two

and i have another great story to fit this!!

Leon fell to the ground as the demon shot him with an energy ball of electricity.
"Leon!" Alma screamed as he was falling, and Lamazar (me!) ran over to where Leon was picked him up on his shoulders and brought him to Alma and right before the demons spikey tail crushed them Lamazar had just enough time to put his shield up and block it. "Go and leave this place," he said,"and don't worry about me. After all, the only thing I ever wanted is for this beast to be dead and get revenge for my family." A tear ran down his cheek as the tail striked his shield again and it shattered. Alma's footsteps could be heard as she dragged Leon away from the area. "Alright you bastard, that was my father's shield and I will get revenge for them all!" As he hit the demon with his mother's sword the Holy Avenger he cried, "That's for my mother who you killed while she was sleeping because you were afraid of her sword!" The demon recoiled and screamed high pitched as Lamazar hit him yet again. And that's for my father who's shield even stopped all your minions with one mighty bash to the ground!" The demon squealed in pain high pitched as Lamazar yelled, "And for my brother Leon who you could've just now killed and if he's dead, I'll even fight you for an eternity if it means getting revenge!" He sliced the demon's leg nearly off so far and left a big gash in its face. The demon took no notice and shot Lamazar with the same energy ball used on Leon. Lamazar was hurt and on his knees now but stood slowly and was determined to never give up. Blood and sweat were mixed together as it all dripped on the flor from both the combatants. Lamazar smiled and said, "Very well, it seems you won't back down, and I have but one option left." He charged up all energy he had left to the center of his body and prepared for an attack that had 50% chance of killing him but would surely kill his opponent. "List'iner Vocho TePair!"
He and the whole cavern along with the demon exploded. Leaving nothing but rubble dust and a place for people to dig through looking for him or the demon.
As Alma and Leon showed up they began to have tears roll down their cheeks knowing what Lamazar had done and as they cried a metal gloved hand that belonged to the man who survived burst through and with it Lamazar with a yell of triumph.
I hope you liked it man as usual 5/5 10/10
keep up the great work

MaestroRage responds:

A brutal and epic battle for sure. Lamazar doesn't take nothing from nobody it seems >:(!

The story flows well, the events and descriptions present, the sentences seemed a little unnatural, for example

""Go and leave this place," he said,"and don't worry about me. After all, the only thing I ever wanted is for this beast to be dead and get revenge for my family."

could be written as

"Go, leave this place!" he said, "Don't worry about me, the only thing I could ever want is to destroy the beast that killed my family!"

small changes, but important ones. I of course suggest these to you because I do think you have a talent for writing, and will eventually become really good. Keep up the good work!

Concerning the story itself. It takes a might big man to eradicate an entire cavern and survive! But that just makes it all the more epic. Risking his own life for the spell that would crush so many. It was an interesting idea to give the mother the blade and the father the shield, where normally it would be the reverse...

thank you for the review, i'm glad you liked it!

[UltimateAgent]

Epic

The story you gave matches the music well. We can always use more of this stuff.

MaestroRage responds:

and more of this stuff will be showered on the servers that is Newgrounds :D!

Thank you for the review, i'm glad you liked it!

[SSXorcist15]

It's like war...yeah...

Beautiful. You keep doin' this and you'll be up there with the big dogs, like Evil-Dog and Dimrain47...like patriotic almost...I'm listening to it as I'm typing, so I'm hearing it for the first time. And I like it. A lot. You've got my 5. And 10. And whatever...

MaestroRage responds:

Perhaps, though I am not at all interested in trying to become big, merely doing what I like to do, which is tell stories.

I am glad you liked the piece though, thank you for the review!

[CrazyMacYo]

Tense

Really nice piece. The score must have taken a while to write out. I also like the fact that this piece really brings out the feeling of being really tense in a serious situation, just like on Dark Cut 2, where you have to hurry to save the patient. Very nicely composed.

MaestroRage responds:

the score for this was produced in roughly 10-12 hours, depending on mastering, and the number of times I listened through it for perfection sake. Despite all this the theme in my opinion is far from over. There are many equalizing factors to throw in, expansion, work that could be done on it etc. Though at this stage, it is good enough to sit around and take up internet space :D!

The song itself was not meant to depict urgency, more hostility, but Dark Cut 2 was brilliant in the way that it brought that urgency into it.

Thank you for the review, i'm glad you liked it!

[TsizzinC]

Not today, maybe tomorrow, when it not a saturday

Now when the world does end, this song should be playing... nah just kidding. it portrays the cool destructions and explosions that may be found, but not so much to the suffering and sorrow all around...

now about the song :)
dramatic from start to end. Nice trumpet fanfares and base drum phrases. I dont really hear any melody though. Just a bunch of short harmonic lines, which sounds amazing though your masterful craft. Great job, I believe i heard some sweet short horn coolness... keep up the good work!

MaestroRage responds:

indeed indeed, if the world was ending to this tune, then it means there was either a nuclear war that brought it to this point, or some force of anger, with no other sensation has taken it upon itself to remove our existence.

Besides such a piece would have to be significantly longer, I don't people would be alive long enough to hear it loop, so a good 20-30 minutes would be ideal :D!

And you are correct to say there is no definite theme, phrase, or melody. This song is a flow of different sources of anger. The man in the story that this song depicts is one that holds such contempt, such hatred for all things around him that it would be impossible to pin it all down on one source.

I do have a lot of subtle instruments going on and off in most of my pieces, so if you did hear those horns, say hi to them, because they often get missed and ignored, and then I have these depressed instruments who can't do squat >:(

Thank you for the review, i'm glad you liked it!