I am a big fan of your visual novels (I wouldn't call this a game, but it's not a problem for me): there may be some flaws (I'll talk about them later), but the story is always great! Keep up the good work, I'm looking forward for your next submission.
This said, I'm going to talk about the things you could improve:
- Art: I like your "manga" art style, but the lines are a bit "rough" (I'm not sure how to tell this in English). You should probably "refine" the edges of your drawings somehow (don't ask me how: I'm worse than a 5 yo when it comes to drawing xD)
- Typos / bad writing: English is not my first language, but I found a couple of them (I just remember two, at the moment: "cigarette" and "delicious", but I'm sure there were more). I also found some sentences that didn't "sound good" to me. I assume English is not your first language too, so I suggest you find someone who knows English very well and wants to review your dialogues and writing. Anyway your work is still perfectly enjoiable.
- Slowness: I have to say I didn't find it disturbing this time (as I did in Remember Death), but it could be useful if the "S" key could be used to make the dialogue go faster.
Reviews for "Beyond Darkness"
Even though the interface weren't very nice and the drawings could've been better,the story was good and has everything that I haven't thought about! Rare to see this nowadays
I really enjoyed this. I usually don't like to read stuff, but this just seemed interesting to me from the start and it didn't bore me at any time. The artwork was really pretty and I liked how you made all the different kinds of characters and their personalities. The story development was also very good. It's was very mysterious and sad. I liked the ending a lot. Really beautiful and creative story. Keep up the good work!! I really enjoyed it :3.
Your games are great, continue making them!
I love this story it makes me cry a lot. This is definitely the best story i have ever watch.Its awsome how the story develops the final because its very sentimental.