I am a big fan of your visual novels (I wouldn't call this a game, but it's not a problem for me): there may be some flaws (I'll talk about them later), but the story is always great! Keep up the good work, I'm looking forward for your next submission.
This said, I'm going to talk about the things you could improve:
- Art: I like your "manga" art style, but the lines are a bit "rough" (I'm not sure how to tell this in English). You should probably "refine" the edges of your drawings somehow (don't ask me how: I'm worse than a 5 yo when it comes to drawing xD)
- Typos / bad writing: English is not my first language, but I found a couple of them (I just remember two, at the moment: "cigarette" and "delicious", but I'm sure there were more). I also found some sentences that didn't "sound good" to me. I assume English is not your first language too, so I suggest you find someone who knows English very well and wants to review your dialogues and writing. Anyway your work is still perfectly enjoiable.
- Slowness: I have to say I didn't find it disturbing this time (as I did in Remember Death), but it could be useful if the "S" key could be used to make the dialogue go faster.
Reviews for "Beyond Darkness"
Amaaaaazing!
I saw some minor typos, but they didn't bother me at all because the storyline was so good! well done! I look forward to your next project!
Waaaaah! I'm a man and I nearly cried.. ;(
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This story is just amazing, I loved it !... That's so sad...
Great, really !
Good, story.
Couldn't cry at my aunts funeral, but cry at this all the feels. ^_^