I think you accomplished what you hopped to do. sadly, I wished the narrative was read with a little more empathy rather than a "matter-of-fact" tone. Choosing your words wisely can make the world of difference in how the story is perceived. I'm not concerned with the game play, because as to 72 hours I think it worked quite well for the purpose. Again, though, I wish there was more an explanation as to how he died... because honestly I don't even know if he was meant to me the driver or not... even though, if he was or wasn't the driver I couldn't really see why physically pushing the monstrosity from the outside would make any difference. But I reiterate, for 72 hours I think its good work... not great or astounding, but enough to deserve 3.75 in my books
Reviews for "Mr. Moore's Last Seconds"
Probably one of the more gripping short narratives I've heard on NG to date. This was, by far, the best short game I've played on NG.
1/5
Even taking into consideration that this was a "game" produced in only 72 hours, I can find no redeemable qualities in it to justify a score higher than a 1 out of 5 stars.
When one looks objectively at it, there is really nothing here besides a lot of smoke and mirrors.
I'm sure something more substantial could've been produced, even in such a short amount of time. I'm curious aboutt he other games made for this 'Ludlum Dare 27" to see how this compares.
Now, don't get me wrong, i'm not trying to criticize this just for the sake of criticism, I just find nothing of note here nor anything worth more than the 1 star I gave it. That one star is for making a "game" in 72 hours - I give you credit for that.
There are plenty of qualities that deserve at least more than one star, which others have clearly stated. I see no constructive feedback in your comment but thanks for the view.
I think that saying that this is deep with an amazing story and an impressive narrative would be useless.What i will say is congratulations.You got my vote there.I can see that a lot of work was put into the creation and I was surprised how you made a life put into 10 secs.It is fine as it is but it would be even better if it was just a bit longer.If you have the time could you make a second version or something with a bit more levels.
why can't I contain these feels D: