Reviews for First Time Rule Breaker

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VAC 11 Judge Review:

You sound like an alternative Tara Strong, I was reminded of that especially when you did that Seth voice. I laughed at how it immediately cut off at the end. Good plot, not too new but you still executed it with some twists and still made it funny. Your acting was also very good, the voices you did for the hall monitors made them sound like a dynamic duo of sorts, with Jade being a defining third voice. Perhaps the dynamic duo was also a negative point as the two sounded similar and had similar spunky personalities. To be critical, when Paige and Jade began all the business at the boy’s bathroom, I was just a little confused as to how Ms. Harvey was still there? Aside from that, the entirety of this entry was really quite well done. Simply the audio for a cartoon short. Excellent work!

Piper responds:

Heheh. You know, I've been hearing that a lot, about the script not being very original. I wrote about seven other scripts and decided on this one sepcifically for its simplicity and originality hoping it would intrigue the audience, so these reports of sounding and seeming like other scripts has probably been the biggest blow for me, darn. Perhaps if I had made it a junior high school on Io, gave all of them alien names, made the hall pass an organic microchip, and had them hide in a fat man's belly button instead of the utility closet? lol. My biggest fear however, was having Paige and Seth sound too close to each other, despite my strenuous efforts here it seems my lack of ability and experience really showed in this situation. I will be sure to keep an ear out for too similar of nuances in the future. Thank you for all of your feedback. It was very helpful. I'll be sure to apply it to my future projects!