I dunno If I could do it better myself but..
I think as many others that the flash sort of forces the symbolism on us, and I think you could have made it much clearer with a bit more animation, and a little less text.. especially the last "note" we should be shown enough to draw that line ourself :)
but a little plus for the nice animation, have to say I think it looks beautiful =3
good luck with future animations, from what I read on your replies they may only be better ;)
Hey I voted 4 on this & everything but...
WTF FUCKING SHIT IS THIS CRAP 'BOUT?!
Good Style
I liked the overall style of your artwork. Nice illustrative feel, especially with the paper effect. I got the gist of the story, but the "editing style" could have been more thematic. The movie clip animation was pretty basic at times. While it could be said that was part of the style; if it was, it was lacking in intentionality, because it's not up to par with your good drawing skills. As you progress in animation with your slick style of artwork, I foresee some even more polished work.
Thanks. I'm definitely limited in what I can do animation wise right now, I'm pretty much self taught in flash, so that played a role in some scenes looking less polished than others. I enjoy animating however, and I'd really like to improve my abilities. I think more experience will really help.
Great
Very interesting story and very nice animation.
Love your style,
Yet, it seems like the story'd be stronger without all that text--at least, I didn't feel that they added anything your visuals weren't already implying.