Good story here
So for a movie submission, This had its good and bad parts. For the most part, the good out-weighed the bad, so it was an movie entry I would recommend to others in an instant, It was a simple submission / movie but still enjoyed what you have here. So for me this was a great find and Discovery in the portal, It was Wonderfully done. The "STORY" part of things here was pretty impressive, the "VISUALS" are not bad somewhat simple but that made well for the story so i was pretty impressed with this one, also like the different "VIEW-SHOTS" And now we come to the end here well almost and what I took away from the experience here was that it was pretty interesting and Refreshing some stuff could be made better and have more entertaining value, I hope i can Clarify that later or maybe i have here, but thats all explained later, but for the most of this I liked it, so good work here.
~~THINGS TO IMPROVE ON~~
There are many ways to improve on this, and I have some advice here and there a few tops and a few adjustments should make this a top notch flash, so try a few of the ideas and and let the flash become even better. So try some of the ideas and advice, maybe you will see something and go with it, and in the end it will make a better outcome of a flash movie entry. I can see these "SHORTER" but in a series of sorts, this was good but did go long.
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