Reviews for A Poem

[Hyena19]

Again, this doesn't belong here.

Sigh.. this doesn't belong here, Oats. THis is not the place to put an emotional flash text poem. If you want to make more flash poetry, then put some images in. I disagree with the guy below. Newgrounds should be more than welcome to artsy movies as long as it has good graphics, sound, and plot. Violence isn't ALWAYS necessary. You have a plot, but you need more of the other two. At the very least, put symbolic images in with the text. A red rose to symbolize the relationship, maybe wilt it away when you break up, and use tears. Show a gun and have it fire when the gunshot can be heard. End it with blood running down the screen, or write "THE END" in blood. These are just examples. With proper graphics and sound, I'm sure even Newgrounds could be captivated by serious poetry.

[cath]

umm could we stop the rhyming??

ok nice idea.. but poems do NOT have to rhyme!! (hint hint!!!)
I believe there is a place for poetry and stuff on newgrounds, but i think you'll find that anything deep and meaningful on newgrounds is either a little abstract, or awesome graphics or both.
I think the idea of a flash poem on newgrounds has potential, but good poetry is not a bunch of words that rhyme. sure they make sense, but poetry is about imagery and using all of the senses and stuff. this is about as meaningful as
"he was oh so fat
oh old mr cat
he just jumps in the tree
and meows with glee
but not with much success
as he was wearing a dress
and he was oh so fat
old mr cat"

heh maybe i should do a flash heheh
i will forgive you for the poetry cause you are a young'un but the flash i cannot...
sorry sweetie..

[AfroUnderscoreStud]

It was just text and sounds.

All this was was just text with some sound effects, the sound effects didn't even go with the movie at all, excluding the gunshot at the end. If you were going to make this movie you should have ahd some visuals, like you should have had a movie sequence playing as the poem's text was appearing at the bottom, it could have made a good movie, but what you had was just completely pointless as it was just nothing other than text and some sound effects.

Peace Out, Afro Stud

0/5

[Blackknight-13]

Dude, this just fucking sucked

That was about a dumb ass poem. Never have I read something so stupid. As the guy before said, leave the text only stuff to paper and pencil, and post something real, if you post anything at all.

[Undecilion]

What were you thinking?

Why did you bother to make this? The sound was the exact same damn loop the whole time, and the only visuals were the text on a black background! The poem wasn't even GOOD. Use some iambic pentameter or something next time instead of just making the last words in the lines rhyme. Finally, no one here wants to read poetry, but if you absolutely feel the need to submit your "works" (either because you totally lack humor or you feel a great need to add what you think is enlightenment to the community), do something other than printing it out with a crappy background and mood-deafening soundclips.