It has potential.
There a few things that could use some improvment. You need acually show that the guy was walking and not just make him float from here to there. Plot holes are a big problem too, like why the hell would someone just come up to shoot you? coulda cleared your charater motives a little better. Also I've seen that style way too many times, but I can't really complain.
Hmm, maybe I should've given that guy a line to say anyway, the thing is.. he was in the first episode, if you watched it.:)
He kinda got left behind, which ruined his life.. I thought it would be clear enough.
Very nice
I really liked it, the storyline was great. It's kinda what me and my gf are going through at the moment. I agree with the essay guy tho, the ending of 5 should have been a happy one with happy phrases and them doing things together.
The same with the bully, ey, wtf? If he was following him then he should have realised that the original angel had just turned him down. Why would he then want revenge?
But overall, bloody awesome keep it up. ^^
Something is out of place here. . .
I watched your entire series and I'm sorry to say this last one just doesn't mesh in right. I voted 4 on everyone one of the series except this last one which I gave a 3. I don't want to spoil the movie, but if you've watched the first four and then this last one you'll realize there's too many things that just got randomly thrown into the story that some what de-railed it or sent it into full reverse. And on the topic of randomness, the ending is a good example of how you made some right-angle turns with this last episode.
Flawed delivery of classic love story
I hate to be strict with someone's labor of love--one landing on the front page, in fact--but there were a few knots in my stomach as well as my heart. While I won't go into whether or not it's a cliche, I will say that there are quirks that make this tear-jerker hard to swallow.
Graphics are Seven (review representative of series overall). Instances depicting violence could not be perfectly rendered through the classic South Park-inspired artwork. It was a simple approach, but decently made with effects to boot.
Style receives a four because the South Park style does not make a good tear-jerker plot. Since we associate the paper cut style to a topical yet juvenile cartoon show, it is hard to associate a love story through it. I remember the graphic adventure of Ray--rendered in the South Park style--and I imagined how better it could be had the author upped the presentation with a more realistic style. Same thing here... only for your sake, the series has at least one strong point: barring few instances of voice-overs (which were actually quite bland), it was silent film style... for the most part. If the South Park style could better display diverse emotion, then you could ideally ride upon this style.
Sound gets a 6 for one good reason: the choice of soundtrack. This turns out effective (two songs per film, not always by Hans Zimmer); most cases, authors flub on this decision. It might not be from the audio portal, but it works. Sound is also where I judge voice acting. Sadly, even with Rika-Chan backing you up, voice-overs sound stiff overall. You did okay trying for the harshness of the bully in Episode III, but never hush your voice regardless of your domestic setting; always throw your voice at every chance you got. I cannot vouch for the rest of it. Give better attention towards rehearsing and coaching--even a few lines, since those few lines are typically pivotal.
Violence gets a four (blood, violent acts, etc.)
Interactivity gets a 2 (play and replay).
Humor is a zero. It's not a contextually humorous tale.
Now in terms of writing...
Now, while characters evolve (his former tormentor gives him a break in the third episode), not everything is explained. A viewer barely notices what happens at the first episode that could possibly explain what happens in the fifth. Furthermore, the abrupt end through a random shooting never ceases to amaze me. The redhead appears like a Deus Ex Machina to solve his dilemma and, even then, the tale ends with an abrupt death. Did it honestly need that to happen?
...Frankly, most people will just consider that painfully bad writing.
Unless I missed something--as if the shooter was someone they knew personally who fired in jealous rage--I have got to say that random act of violence was where I vomited. I let myself go along with the dire ups and downs of a classic romance, sparse in its detail or reason, and then saw that.
Ironically, the part where I'm most critical at does not allow me to say this story is poor and undeserving of front page status. You got a six overall because your story at least sounds plausible, like even a shot in the dark at that crucial moment could happen. And you end up wondering if things could possibly be different, like if he ever did realize the redhead smiled his way too, could his rough plight across six years be averted?
Anyway, you managed to hold my attention and captivate my imagination enough to write a lengthy review (possibly one of my longest ones!). It might be hard, but it's as fair as I can muster. You demonstrate a good showing, especially since the story is still grounded, regardless of flaws. Good job... and I hope you'll do better with your next flash.
After watching the others
I loved 1-4 for some reason. (I even, yes, I'm in a weak state right now, shed a tear or two. Memories.) But 5 was even more predictable then the rest, and it doesn't even show who gets killed. I think it was a bad way to end it. (You should make one more - the epilogue)
Anyway, I liked the series overall. :) who cares if some other people didn't?