Not very good, but the Music is the best.

I feel that this could use a lot of work if you were to keep it going.

I noticed that the graphics seemed to be in bitmap format giving it that old style look as if playing an older game or something along those lines where the backgrounds would like like that while exploring. Also kind of makes me think of Resident Evil 2 and 3 backgrounds.

The choice in audio was great to fit with this. Then came the voice which sadly was completely monotone and which made the flash fall flat on delivery of what you were trying to convey.

The huge problem with this flash is even with lower quality to make it faster the audio and voice are quick to desync with the animation itself. I noticed past the first line delivered that the screen kept scrolling and the second screen was almost over before the next line came and going a little further in the audio and video go rather out of sync with the audio ending way before the video does.

I would suggest watching the flash yourself and seeing if changes need to be done. Either choose a longer song and speak without being monotone or speed up how quickly each area or scene is being shown to prevent it from going out of sync, that was pretty much the only thing ruining it for me.

Overall, while the backgrounds and such are nice, the audio desyncs after a few seconds.

Review Request Club

Rather misses the point of NATA - Newgrounds Annual Tournament of Animation, when you don't so much animate, as move things around within the scene. The story is told in the most boring voice possible and the subtitles fell so far out of sync with the spoken word, I had trouble deciphering the plot.

Seriously, this is something to drop the animation on and write the script for - let the writers of this community have a look, before de-constructing it a little, assisting you with plot exposition and then you come back and have another crack at the animation side of things.

When it comes to the actual animation, throw in more movement and increase the drama - the narrator should be secondary and these additional scenes could be fleshed out a bit, to include a harder hitting piece of cinematography.

It's a start, but it needs a lot of work to make it past the open round.

[Review Request Club]

God plot, amazing scenario. Sound was good, but even with high quality, the sound ended way faster than the animation (even before the narrator appear @_@').

Keep up the good work ^^b