Not my thing
While I appreciate that this is one of the pieces that you made years ago and it was on a DS, which is now an outdated media and so forth, shouldn't thins just be left there? I mean, I've been writing stories for years now and some of my earlier works, the pieces which I used to learn the techniques are obsolete now - the work I do now is much better and that's what I want people to see. I'm almost embarrassed by those stories, to tell the truth.
Yes, there are techniques that you've learned from this and back in the day, had Newgrounds existed in its present form, with the sort of hardware that we employ, getting this on the Flash Portal would have been a lot easier and you'd have got the feedback.
As for the animation itself - take out the quality issues from the VHS videocamera and so forth, you could have used some colour on the drawings, even if it was going to take you a lot longer to make the piece, it would have been worth it.
Sounds and effects would have been a nice addition, but the constraints of your hardware was the main issue there - I hope that you've learned enough since progressing to flash, so that you can take these steps to make your pieces that much better now.
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