It doesn't include anything funny, sorry
You know, flash is getting more and more a question of mainstream.
But now I seriously wonder, what your target was with that one generally.
There's no real scenerio; at the beginning, you see Pico entering some building and that's it. The ending was predictable because of the title, the coup itself is something we've all seen already many times. There aren't any dialogues, and besides the coup there isn't any action either.
The way of animation is poor, but well, for some pico related flash: average - though the sounds were more interesting. But the biggest flaw: It simply wasn't funny at all.
Looking at the animation more carefully, you succesfully combined your horribly poor animating skills with some intelligence / movie culture knowledge. Or maybe you were just lucky. However, let me say that the extra poorly detailed black/white-frames and the camera jumping did their thing. The multiple angles made it look way more interesting and allowed some looks at the background walls with you know what on it. The facial impressions were rather good again, though you got problems with Picos face since there was more to animate than only two eyes goggling around. I also find the last frame (which fades out) somehow strange.
The sounds were fucking bad but surprisingly well placed. You better find some more softer soundset that It doesnt crica-craca so hard.
Also, it was short and you definetly didn't give all frames the same amount of Narcissy-love (okay you're not the only artist). The crinkles on the clothes made me smile sometimes, so keep some eye on that, they're too dark and rather look like blocked arteries.
So next time, don't forget about the humour, avoid clichees n don't make pseudo letters by Tom.
Disappointed, though for a pico flash this is not disappointing. You can do that better right.
All true. This flash was more of a way to tell Soup Squad members "I'm willing to work on stuff." This was my first time actually dealing with having to redraw a character as well. I tend to have a hard time getting good sounds, and overall, this was sorta rushed. I understand that the art was not top notched and we plan to get better at it. Clothing I can agree with, and my art, drawing of Pico, is far from good.
However, I argue with a few things you pointed out -- there is nothing wrong with having a letter made by "Tom" in my flash -- it's a parody. Nor do all flashes have to be funny, though it helps.
Now, PM this if you want to answer, how do you mean "Narcissy-Love"? If you're speaking of how I usually try to animate each frame to give it a life effect, such as Truth of Osama, then I agree. This was rushed. Many of the characters, when not animated, appear lifeless -- Taco Soup for example.
However, I appreciate your input, all was noted, and hope you continue to review Soup flashes.