He was so close to the girl! Aw! Where's the eject button when you need one?
Author Comments
Alright, here it is.
Installment Number 2.
Enjoy, and review...?
Nightbreaker
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Sorry the Preloader doesn't work.
Hopefully you get the idea. ^.^
You just have to wait for it to finish loading, and a play button will still show up.
Hmm...
Not really sure what to say about this...
The effects were pretty nice and you orchestrated it perfectly to fit 'Entering The Stronghold' but there were a few snags.
The main one is how you implemented the music. You just began halfway through the song (something I noticed right away) and it was so quiet that the epic feel of it just went away.
Fixes: Fade in the music. Make it a LOT louder. This piece was visual expression with music as a guide. I don't have a clue what you wanted to convey if I can't hear anything.
8/10 (Minor improvement needed)
Fate responds:
thanks for the review. I guess I didn't think it needed turning up because my headphones are pretty loud (*shrugs*)
also...I didn't think there was anything wrong with starting halfway through the song.
There was only so much story to tell.
Artwork was very nice
It may not have been that memorable, but the use of CGI was pretty impressive, and it was nice to see an interesting mix of animation in a flash. I enjoyed it very much.
nice man ;)
I love the effects in there, and the music fits great. Really good job! The story is a bit hard to follow, like zero123music said, but nonetheless, 5/5, 10/10 ;) I don't mind the preloader. It looks great, that's enough for me.
Mjattie
Fate responds:
:D Thanks.
Yeah, I'm starting to feel that it must've been difficult to follow.
Obviously, to me, I know what's going on, so I don't realise.
But I've put as much effort into the third one as i can to make sure this doesn't happen again.
Thanks for the review.
So random-ish
I guess it had a story, but none the less I loved everybit of it!
The end was really classy :)
I suggest fixing the preloader, then editing it in "your flash submissions" page, or at least put instructions on how to skip the preloader..
Other then that, it's amazing!
Fate responds:
The preloader works enough.
you just have to wait for it to finish loading, and it comes up with the 'play' button, it just doesn't show the progress.
...'random-ish'...hmmm
But I'm glad you liked the ending.
and thanks for the 10.
