This is half of chapter one i wanted feedback if it was going fast enough and was keeping attention please leave feedback thanks.
On a planet called Earth not to different from the one that your on, well there is one difference everyone has super powers. From space you would never know, it all looks peaceful and happy but the reality is that on this planet there is a war. The world is at war with a Organization called TEO (The Exiled Ones). Right now a great battle is happening in a county called Scotland and that's is where this story begins.
A man in a green and muddy army uniform pointing towards a hills screams "Here comes another Wave of Heth!"
screaming and shouting more than 20 samely dressed men charge towards the hill all throwing flames,ice,earth and ripples of air from there bodies towards hundreds of black faceless men. Boom the first volley of attacks hit the faceless men, the ones hit just explode and vaporize. The Heth do not even move they just watch as the soldiers run towards them screaming and throwing more powers at them.
"Tell your men to fall back cant you see its a trap General." Instructed the voice behind the general.
The general spun round to look at a man who was around five foot ten. He had bright red hair and his face was covered with a mask which had only had one right eye hole there was no left one. His huge black trench coat covered him from neck to shoes and with his hands in his pockets he was just this floating tench coat and head.
"WHAT! YOU! what are you doing here?"
The masked man walking past the general looking towards the chaos at the hill simple replied " I was send here by headquarters to check the area good thing too the Heth have never been one's for plans yet, the last 4 battles I have been in they had a plan. This worries me looks like their leader is making moves and we don't know what it is." he turns to look at the general "this worries me. Oh and yes didn't I say pull your men back I will deal with this."
The general in a sweat looks down and stutters "Y Y Yes Sir!"
As the general starts screaming into his walkie talkie the masked man starts walking calmly towards the hill were the battle still continues. He continues to walk untill he is at the bottom of the hill and all the men are running back swishing past him. The masked man turns to look at where he has come from and shouts "Are all your men back?"
a shout replays "Yes"
The masked man turns back towards the hill and notices the army of Heth are slowly walking towards him. There is no sense of panic or urgency when he pulls out his right hand from his coat he does it calmly and abit lazily and points towards the heth open palmed.
BOOM a huge explosion in the middle of the Heth army. Dusk everywhere and black bits and pieces go flying past the masked man. It takes a few seconds but the dust settles and in its place is a huge crater where the Heth used to be.Some Heth are still standing others are getting up but only about a handfull are left.
"Dam i was hoping that would waste them all and i cant do it again looks like am doing this the long way. Dammit!"
He pulls out his other hand and like a bullet shoots towards them. The Heth notice him and for the first time in the battle get ready, they all morph their black hands into black weapons swords, hammers and scythes all ready to kill him.
"General who is that masked man?"
"Dont you know? Thats Ammon the hidden one."
"What the real Ammon the Ammon who took down a entire Heth Headquarters by himself, Ammon the war hero!"
"The very one son today we witness a monster at work."