I like the quirky synths at the beginning, but the choir sample sounds a bit cheesy and inauthentic. The rhythm of the beat at :09 is a little hard to follow, and the synth that comes in at :15 might sound a bit better with a more rounded, legato sound (as opposed to short and pizzicato-y). I think there are a number of sudden transitions in the piece, like at 1:03, and also that the syncopations are a bit overly complicated. Part of the problem could be that the mix is a bit too muddy to make the different instruments sound distinct. I’d suggest cutting back on the reverb at times and getting stricter with the equalizers. The panning you used for the string samples was a good idea, but equalization should usually be the main method for making sure each instrument comes through clearly in the texture. The piece might need a stronger sense of shape and structuring. Gradual transitions, more volume automations and phrasing, and other compositional techniques could help with that. I also think there are multiple melodies at the refrain (e.x., 1:18) that play over each other, which sounds a bit jarring. I was also a little thrown off by the eerie sound effects at 2:16 and 2:30. Still, I think you did a great job overall with the harmonic content and atmosphere here. I’m more concerned about the arrangement, mixing, and sound design, although the instruments do blend well together. I’d encourage you to keep working on this piece. It sounds like a really cute VGM track in the making. :) Keep at it, OddaSykes!

Mixing, mastering, and balance
1.25/2
Structure, transitions, phrasing, and variety
.75/1.5
Melody, tonality, harmony, and texture
1.75/2
Instrumentation and sound design
.5/1
Emotion, atmosphere, and catchiness
1/1.5
Originality and uniqueness
.75/1
Overall (how do the elements above interact?)
.25/1
Composite score
6.25/10

This song is a really great idea but is 50% great and 50% small mistakes that ruin it for me.

I like the little melodic ideas but instruments and sound-design could be better. Adding reverb or searching for some better soundfonts / samples [spitfire audio labs has some nice free sounds] would make a very big difference.

I would also try to make the main melodies (00:16-00:38) more organic, they're coming off as a bit too robotic. In contrast the melody from 00:40- 01:03 is a lot better, sounding not robotic at all.

There is no break from the percussion for 3 minutes, I would try removing percussion at 1:04 to give the listener's ears a break.

Sorry I'm only giving criticism I actually really like your song, which is why i'm commenting. Good job, keep it up!